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TOEFL -AMBITION (to teach Chinese as a froeign language)



whitney 21 / 38  
Jan 15, 2011   #1
My ambition is to be a teacher to teach Chinese as a froeign language because of the following reasons.

First, it is a chllenge for me and I can improve myself through the process. For example, teaching language cannot avoid talk about culture so I need to know the difference between Chinese culture and the culture foreign students come from.

Scond, I love to be a teacher. When I was young, I admire teachers a lot. Because they seem to know a lot of things and they are modles for students. At that time, I have determined to become a teacher to enjoy students' admiration and love.

Third, I love language a lot. And I like to communicate with foreign people about the differnce and connection between Chinese and other languages.

So that's why I want to be a teacher to teach Chinese as a foreign language.

pashnetala 1 / 6  
Jan 16, 2011   #2
your answer is good but not great use adverbs as much as you can and use besides, furthermore, however,... and your answer is little bit too much to finish in 45 seconds. (considering the stops,making and developing reasons and speaking (you know what I mean) )

you know its much more like writing not speaking (if you wanna write it here ok do it as you speak)

first of all do develop your first sentence like:

My ambition is to be a teacher you know I love to be a teacher its my dream you know I do like teach chinese you know I think I will be a good one in it you know for one thing because its a challenge for me and I can improve... for another because I love to be a teacher you know I feel it deeply inside you know when I was young...

Yang dont say because of the following reasons, its very formal.

and please do answer and develop the free choices questions with just 2 reasons or causes.

45 seconds its not enough for answering and developing more than 2 reasons.

Yang, you dont need to be honest at TOEFL, (speaking, writing) you can use any reasons, causes ... to answer and develop your answers

like:

I love going to concerts you know Im kind of addict to it I actually go to concerts every day... (Yang I hate concerts)

you know my dad plays flute (but Yang my dad never plays flute) my mom plays piano and I do like playing guitar I think we can make a good band ...

;)


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