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'avoid repeating fault'; A person should never make an important decision alone.


stellastella 18 / 25  
Dec 24, 2011   #1
A person should never make an important decision alone. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Individuals have made a large number of decision in different area throughout their life such as education, career and financial. If you ask me, I completely agree that people should never make an important decision alone. I myself most of the time ask someone else to help me for making a decision or at least I ask them to tell me their opinion about my decision which I am going to make.

To begin with, it is a good idea to always consult with the people who are knowledgeable in the field which we are going to make a decision. For instance, in university whenever I want to sign up for a course I have always refer to an advisor or asked the students who had this course in the past. I ask them to explain to me what are the material of that course, is this a helpful course for my major? and who is the best professor in this field.

What is more, experience show, if we ask other's opinion and if we get familiar with their experiences we are more successful in are decision. Also, we can avoid repeating their fault in our decision which are really helpful and sometimes might help us to save our time and money.

All in all, If a decision-maker want to be successful and face with at least of problems and failures the best way is to consult with experienced people and getting familiar with their opinion, and ask them what they are going to do if they were us?
palindromeman - / 7  
Dec 25, 2011   #2
I think you have some great ideas but you need to be more structured in what you write. also, many of the words that you used present tense for like "refer" you really want to use the past tense "referred". you use personal experiences too much (I do not know if this is the purpose of the essay or not) so I would include some current issues where having help in making a decision is necessary. when you said "is this a helpful course for my major" you should use quotation marks to refer to this. also, the "are" in the last sentence should be changed to a "would" and the ending does not need a question mark, it needs a period.

all in all, you know what you are writing about, you just need to work on grammar and finding better examples
Devson 1 / 1  
Dec 25, 2011   #3
palindromeman
Yes, you are right this passage should not end with a Question Mark. It is not very much affective to the readers. Like me stellastella, you also need to work on grammar and tenses majorly.
Deniz 1 / 2  
Dec 25, 2011   #4
I think, you should not end your passage with a question. And it is not affective enough.


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