IELTS 1 - Bar chart: Various subjects in university which were selected by undergraduates in 2005

The bar chart below shows the numbers of students who chose certain university subjects in 2005

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

ANSWER:
This bar graph illustrates that various subjects in university which were selected by undergraduates in 2005.
Overall, Science and Mathematics were favorite subjects of male students in 2005. By contrast, female chose less technical subjects so Social sciences and Languages were the most popular among female students.

According to the graph, the number of male students with choosing figures ranged from the highest number of just over 20 thousand to the lowest number of about 2 thousand, a difference of around 18 thousand. Science, Math and Literature were their favorite subjects.

Social sciences and Languages were chosen by female the best with the figures nearly 25 thousand and under 20 thousand. This two subjects had more female choosing figures than male students. The other subjects such as Science, Math, Literature and Law, women selected them lower than men. For Humanities, both the number of male and female were the same, just over 10 thousand.

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The essay is strong when seen from a data delivery point of new. The information is truly direct to the point and informative. Half the task requirement was addressed in the presentation. This is why the report is also too short in word presentation. 154 words meets the minimum word count requirement to avoid word count deductions. It does not help the writer meet the actual scoring considerations for the rubic though. Consider the scoring criteria for each section and the lack of scoring representation will be seen.

A task 1 essay of full scoring consideration must be completely developed within 175-200 words. This allows the writer to fully depict an analepis of the data, with more intricate comparisons and sentence formations present for a maximum scoring opportunity. This essay limits the possible final score due to its short and less than critical analysis presentation.

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