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It is better to take a job with a low pay but safe than to take a job with a high pay



quzheng 1 / 1  
Sep 10, 2010   #1
It is better to take a job with a low pay but safe than to take a job with a high pay but easy to lose.

In our society, many people have to work to earn money to support their families, and a job is a man's most precious possession. Due to great financial pressures surrounding us, it is essential for people to earn a lot of money. As a matter of fact, many people equate money with success and are willing to find high-pay job even though it might be easy to lose. However, in view of the seriousness of the competition, an increasing number of people would rather take a low-pay job but is more secure. As far as I am concerned, the sort of job an individual seeks should depend on his or her age.

The young, especially the recent graduates of university, who are full of energy and patience, are more likely to take the jobs with high pay even though are high-risk, because they need to save money to purchase the automotive and house, they feel that material things are more important to them currently. Despite the current worldwide financial crisis, the competition of job is too hard, even cruel for the individual, the unemployment is not terrible for the young. Young people, who are full of vigor and encourage, would like to train again or learn new knowledge in order to get better job and make more money as they can. They do not care about whether the job is stable or not, on the contrary, what they concern about is the accumulation of working experience through competition, which is the source of their future success. Accordingly, the young would like to accept and welcome fierce competition as conditions to which they must accommodate themselves, because it is best for them to become stronger. That is why chinese young people like to work in Shanghai or Shenzhen as a white-collar, whose wage is ordinarily high, but not secure.

By contrast, for middle-aged people, in such an era of increasing growth of population of unemployment, they are eager to find stable jobs, despite low wages. Since in the company, young people are continuously recruited to replace the old employees, in this case, those middle-aged staffs have to constantly take actions to prove that they are better than the young men, meanwhile, they are afraid of being surpassed by the beginners and they normally have a fear of losing jobs, which create constant anxiety and stress. That is the cause of unhappiness of those who are well-paid in corporations. For them, losing job is a disaster. Indeed, they have a strong self-esteem, if they lose the job, they will worry about losing the respect of his friends and neighbours; at the same time, they have a family to support. In particular, they think they are so old that they have not enough energy and time to accept new knowledge like young men, certainly they have a great fear of competition. This is why more and more Chinese people are eager to apply for the civil servants or teachers after working for a few years, because these positions are secure in spite of low pay.

In summary, an apparently insecure job with high pay does not meet everyone's needs, neither does a low-pay, but secure job. Only when we become aware of what we need can we make a wise decision. The young would like to take high-risk but high pay job, however, the middle-age people would rather like a secure job.

mea505 - / 265  
Sep 10, 2010   #2
Hi Quanxing,

That's just it, I don't think that you have one. However, it should be in the first paragraph of the essay, and it should represent your own views with respect to the question being presented to you. I think that if you look at the second and third sentences, you might be able to develop a good thesis statement.

Mark
OP quzheng 1 / 1  
Sep 10, 2010   #3
Hi, Mark,

Thanks for your advice.

Actually, when I get this topic, I just want to describe the different attitudes toward these two choices based on different age of people in China.

So, in your opinion, I need to pick up just one of these two choices to develop my essay, but not try to develop in two choices?

Thanks a lot.

Quanxing
rmli 7 / 10  
Sep 11, 2010   #4
In modern society, everyone needs to find a job to earn his living and support his families. in some degree, we can say that a job is a man's most precious possession. jobs have difference, it will be more competitive , thus not stable for high-pay job. it is not unusual people take high wage as success, and there are person willing to find high-pay job even though it might be easy to lose.However, an increasing number of people would rather take a low-pay job but is more secure. As far as I am concerned, which kind of job an individual seeks should depend on his or her age.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Sep 12, 2010   #5
...and a job is a man person's most precious possession resource.

That is why chinese young people like to work in Shanghai or Shenzhen as a white-collar, whose wage is ordinarily high, but not secure. ---- Great example!! Capitalize "Chinese," though...

As a matter of fact, many people equate money with success and are willing to find a high-pay job even though it might be easy to lose.

Use a semi-colon to fix thins run on sentence:
are better than the young men; meanwhile, they are afraid of being...

...would rather take a low-paying job that is more secure.

As far as I am concerned, the sort of job an individual seeks should depend on his or her age.--- yeah.. you can add a few more words to specify what you mean. This is a great idea, though!! At the end of the essay you can discuss some guidelines for people in different age groups and what you think might be best for them! :-)


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