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'brothers who are already enrolled at NYU' - Why NYU?



ibeckki 4 / 10  
Dec 27, 2011   #1
Prompt: Why NYU?
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My parents have been bringing me into the city at least once a month since I was old enough to walk. I've gone beyond seeing New York as a tourist attraction and have delved into seeing the place from a much different perspective, almost as if I've already lived there. I can easily find my way around the city- I am a Subway and Path train master- and I even know all of the best eateries such as the Shake Shack in Madison Square Park, and Mamouns and Two Bros' Pizza on St. Mark's Place. What I truly love about the city is the character- let me rephrase that- the many characters. It's so much different than the suburbs where I come from. Here, I could walk down the street and be judged for what I'm wearing, what I'm listening to, what I believe, or what my goals and aspirations are. But when I'm in the city, I feel like the sky is the limit; I can live how I want to live and I can be as quirky as I want to be. No one is judgmental, but instead, a person's unique qualities and abilities are what can be appreciated most. The city allows for NYU to be the birth place of opportunity, with countless resources right at its fingertips. Also, because NYU's campus is right in Manhattan, it provides for students to be able to really be a part of the "real world" before they graduate from college. Having two brothers who are already enrolled at NYU and having so much knowledge of the school already, one would think it would be easier to name the the things that I don't like about the school, but in fact it is quite the opposite.

nkprasad12 5 / 18  
Dec 27, 2011   #2
I think you spend too long with yourself and your familiarity with the city when you should be talking more about the college. Intersperse your love of the city with how that love applies/is amplified by NYU.
Citygirl1120 4 / 8  
Dec 27, 2011   #3
^ I agree. I think NYU wants to hear more about why you want to go to NYU specifically, instead of a different school in the city. It's a great idea to mention that you like NYU because its in NYC, but i think you should put in more details as to why you want to university itself. Is there a specific program that only NYU has? etc, things like that
silentspring 12 / 58  
Dec 27, 2011   #4
I agree. But, I really like the conclusion. It is humorous.


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