Community service can give a sense of fullment to students

It is not uncommon for us to see that many people champion that unpaid community service should be an indispensable part of high school programmes. This trend is benefit for students who intend to obtain the first-hand experience from this.

It is apparent that this behavior for students that can gain a vast number of value life skills. With working in unpaid community service , students tend to learn how to communicate with others, how to work together, how to take responsibility by themselves . Besides , they also in a position to enhance the ability to manage time which where therefore improve the efficiency and practice the organization ability. Accordingly, by giving the indispensable unpaid community service students can have a manifold life .

Admittly , most of high school students will not be happy if they forced to join the community service without payment . I think some students who have doesn't have loaded parents are not ready for the unpaid work .In fact ,they need earn money to pay their tuition or somothers . In addition , final session students can't pay enough concentrate on their study that the community service occupy too much spare time. They need to prepare for the entrance exam which is important in their furture.

In summary ,working in community service can give a sense of fullment to students and it should be encouraged for its benefits. Nevertheless it shouldn't be necessary work with unpaid and obligation in high school programmes . If there is a real benefit both to the education of students ,and increase in welfare to society as a whole. It is a good policy , provide the hours required are not very significant. We need to find a balance point make it more better than before.

It is not uncommon for us to see that many people advocate that unpaid community services should be an indispensable part of high school programs. This certainly benefits students who intend to obtain the first-hand experience.


This behavior ? what behavior ? you can say " these extra curricular activities help students gain a vast number of social skills


they also have chances to develop time-management skill and organizing skill


Admittedly -> However
they are forced


have doesn't have -> have not


other things


final session students -> final year students/ senior
can't -> cannot
concentrate is verb, not noun -> students cannot concentrate on their study because the community services occupy most of their time


fulfillment


If..., what next ? i'm so confused what you mean


Providing the hours required is not significant

Your writing have many grammatical errors. You should check it carefully :)

.... Good correction by gabbie.
However, I'd like suggest you a structure for your essay introduction that gives you a guideline to include all essential feature of your intro.

By working in unpiad community services, students will be able to acknowledge the way in which people communicating with others, working together, and being responsibility by themselves .

I hope it can help you. Keep trying
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