Computer make us more productive or less happy and more stupid?

I totally agree with fact that computers were first invented to make our life happier. As with the development of the computers we are able to do things that we could only dream of. Most of the big houses and companies rely on the computers for their information and their development and design. As computers are free of the biases they are capable of giving accurate outputs. With pres of button we are able to gain knowledge on various subjects we can get close to or get in touch with our friends and families very quickly. Now we can order goods and receive service with a click.

We should give credit to the computers for our today's advancement as it doesn't feel tired or other emotion it can give result in an instant and it is the core part of any research and development. Now we are living in the age of computers. It is because of computer we have landed on moon and mars. We are now able to stimulate different scenarios and situations for really conducting the experiment. Now we can control large power plants and projects through computers which otherwise would have been impossible or very difficult to do.

As today's world rely on information which is possible because of computers and because of it the distance learning education are flourishing and more people are getting an opportunity for education. Now computer has formed an essential part of our life we rely on it for various purposes like education, getting in touch with outside world, recreation and getting information. Computer has also helped to realize dream of globalization now it is like we belong to Earth not to a single country.

So, computers have indeed made our life easier, more productive and our lives more convenient. With its development we human race are benefiting from it and advancing in becoming more and more developed and advance race in the universe and with its development we are breaking our limits and wandering into new horizons.

The beginning was really abrupt. You should give a generalized statement first and then build you essay on this statement. Make this statement specific gradually. The same issue was with the conclusion. Secondly, your content quality was really poor. You should have proper content and more importantly you should know enough about your topic. Hope it helps you. And yeah try improving your vocab.

Kajuthapa, There are a number of errors in your essay that need to be corrected. Kindly refer to my suggestions below:


- While you present some very good points in this paragraph, it would be advisable for you to restate the thesis prompt prior to your point of view on the issue. That way the reader has an idea about what the discussion will be about and where the talk stems from.Actually, this is the only part of your previous paragraph that fits as the introduction to the essay. The succeeding paragraph should have been a part of the body.

The body of your essay lacks development and only deals with one portion of the prompt. The part about making us more productive. You could have lengthened and strengthened your discussion by also tacking the second and third part about becoming less happy and more stupid. By discussing all three aspects, you will be able to present your position about computers being invented to make our lives easier and also counter the argument by saying that in the process of making us more productive, computers have also made people happier and more intelligent due to the ease of access to information.

Those are just some of my suggestions that I feel can help improve the over all content of your essay. While I could correct the grammar errors for you now, I always point out the problems with the body of the essay first and opt to correct that first because your grammar errors may lessen or increase depending upon how you revise the essay :-) I am looking forward to reading your revised essay if you choose to show us a new version :-)

I think the introduction should just bring out some background information and the thesis but it seems like you just go directly to the body part.


This sentence is really long and confusing.