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Every conversation have a potential to start a conflict; how to improve face-to-face communication?



sasariri 17 / 22  
Sep 30, 2016   #1
10 ways to make a better conversation by Celeste Headlee (TED Summary)

Starting her speech, Celeste Headlee asked to audience who avoid someone in Facebook because they talks about something offensive. Actually, every conversations have a potential to start a conflict. Nowadays, people do not listen each other. According few research shows that a third students send more a thousand message to their friends than struck up face-to-face chit-chat everyday. Sometimes, Students have huge amount of admirable ideas each other through screen whereas conversation is the one of considerable ability In 21st century. Both of listening and talking are the vital part from an conversations. To make an interesting conversation, we have to keep them balance. Then she declares 10 ways to enjoy our conversation such as do not multitask, do not pontificate while conversation is something you could learn from, go with the flow, and do not be afraid if you do not know just say it. Next, you should use open minded question so avoid the simplest one, do not equate your experience with your chit-chat partner, avoid to repeat yourself, stay out the weed, you have to listen to intend, not to answer and the last one is be brief. As her awful closing statement, she invites us to go out, talk to people, listen to people and be prepared to be amazed.

justivy03 - / 2265  
Sep 30, 2016   #2
Hi Sari, please find below suggestions for your essay.

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There yo have it Sari, I hope the above modifications are helpful to your revision and for future writing reference, it will help a lot if you practice more often, also, you have to know and review the correct form of words to associate to your sentences.
Fitri12 28 / 50  
Oct 1, 2016   #3
Hi Sari, hopefully the followings will help

.....they talks about something offensive. (this sentence is confusing. You also made a major error in using simple Present Tense, since you put "They + talk+S)

Please pay attention to the flow of your writing and its sense of meaning. Thank you.


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