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Corporal punishment good or bad



mehak sharma 3 / 7  
Feb 27, 2013   #1
These days ,it observed that many parents are in favor of physical punishment to discipline their children but its a issue of society that its bad or good but i am partially agree in my point of view.

first and for the most thing is throughout punishment in schools leads to good performance.students get punished strictly which teach them how to leave in decorum with good outcomes .such as if teachers smack children to be in disciplined in early age then it leave great impact on children mind not to repeat that mistakes again in future.so here it has become one important task.

however,it has some disadvantages as well,in schools or any education center teachers commit punishment to students just to release his or her stress.it may lead then to drop off the school or some of them commit suicide due to harsh behavior of teachers .such as children who are leading lavish life mostly because they arr not under control force them to behave ill mannerly among teachers .it get them towards on wrong path.

in additional,its difficult for teachers to manage children by persuading,explain in smooth way all efforts are useless so therefore only on way is left that is corporal punishment which has quickness and effectiveness to make dacorum among students.but it should be in some limited way not should cruel manner.

to conclude .to be strict with children its good method to teach them .but in my views it should be limited way not to be heated .

dumi 1 / 6795  
Feb 28, 2013   #2
These days ,it observed that many parents are in favor of physical punishment to discipline their children but its an issue of society thatwhether its bad or good or badbut i am partially agree in my point of view .

You should take your opinion to a new sentence; otherwise this sentence would be too lengthy and its flow would be affected.
Also, in the modern society, especially in the West, the trend is more to reject physical punishments. So, I think it is not very prudent to say many parents favor that. After all it is very likely that your essay will be evaluated by someone from the West who is not in its favor :D

first First and for the most thing is throughoutthat punishment in schools leads to good performance.

Is that so? You have not supported this reason with an example :(
OP mehak sharma 3 / 7  
Feb 28, 2013   #3
Realy thank you so much for your reply its my first experience today with Ur site i was scared about writing topic bt thanx for this .... hope for the same in next topics....
christyj 5 / 15  
Feb 28, 2013   #4
hai Mehak..

Try to add full question before starting the answer.
capitalize the sentence.
write clear opinion in the introduction.

read more essays. you can read more essays even in the topic of your essay in the similar discussions which is just above the comment area.

leave lines between paragraphs

your essay seems to be too short. try to put more words. and always try to follow the time..

Christy..
OP mehak sharma 3 / 7  
Feb 28, 2013   #5
ok next time i will correct them as u guide me
jennnyyyy 2 / 4  
Feb 28, 2013   #6
There are a lot of grammatical errors and many of the sentences do not start correctly. I think you should read it out loud a couple of times so you can see all your mistakes.


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