energy from Carbohydrates
I would like some help on advice on the writing, language and give some suggestions for improvement and paraphrasing a bit more on the introduction of a literature review on effect of pre-exercise carbohydrate feeding on endurance performance.
Here is the introduction:
Carbohydrates are one of the main fuel sources of energy. Carbohydrates are made of carbon, hydrogen and oxygen molecules part of the hydroxyl group. Carbohydrates can be classified as monosaccharides: glucose and fructose, disaccharides: sucrose and polysaccharides. Energy is required for muscle contraction and ATP is the molecule that enables muscle contraction (Baker et al, 2010). Carbohydrates are the best use of ergogenic aid by athletes when reported by carbohydrate reserves (Cemark & Loon, 2013; Pochmuller et al, 2016). Carbohydrates are important in metabolism ...... Research has clarified that carbohydrate ingestion before exercise can improve exercise performance and delay fatigue.
Studies from Cemark & Loon (2013) and Temaris et al (2011) reported that carbohydrate ingestion during exercise focused on pre-exercise feeding on a few hours before endurance exercise. kerebeth (2010) & Jeukendrup & Keller (2010) limited their focus on short duration >10 mins, high intensity exercise activities- muscle glycogen depletion will not be limiting during exercise (Burke et al, 2011) lasting longer than 60 mins.
Feeding carbohydrates before 30 minutes result in improved high-intensity exercise compared with feeding 2 hours before exercise that size reflect pre-exercise glucose synthesis.
Review focuses in background on carbohydrate feeding on performance, pre exercise carbohydrate feeding, previous literature on carbohydrate feedings at timings of 30 mins, 1 hr and 2 hours. Possibly explore the oral carbohydrate sensing will be discussed.
Hello! I recommend that you use more pronouns like "they" and "it" (to make the essay more concise) because the word carbohydrates is repeated a lot at the beginning of consecutive sentences. Another example is this sentence:
Energy is required for muscle contraction and ATP is ...
It sounds kind of redundant because of how muscle contraction is repeated. Maybe change it to "Energy is required for muscle contraction which is enabled by ATP"
Hope this helps :D
Holt Educational Consultant - / 15461 Amanda, make the second paragraph the first paragraph instead. The actual topic paragraph is located in the second paragraph. So that should be the opening statement of this literature review. If you reverse the positions of the current first and second paragraphs, you will create a stronger review. Another option to improve this review is if you totally remove the first paragraph from the presentation.
You don't have to define what makes up carbohydrates because the readers of the article are more than familiar with the components that create it. Focus instead on the effects of Carbohydrates on exercise performance. If you use just paragraphs 2,3, and 4, the literature overview becomes more interesting. Just expand upon the information in the short paragraphs in relation to your understanding of the overview in order to create a more concise literature review.
Right now, paragraphs 3 and 4 falls short in terms of delivering on information from the original article. Try to find more relevant information in the original article to include in the literature review. I have not read the original source but it seems to me that there is still more information to be taken from the original work for presentation in the literature overview. The more information you present, the less redundancies and need for paraphrasing you will have.
Unfortunately, what you are asking us to do for you is the partial research content for your paper. Which is not what we do here. As you can see, we have already offered you advice as to how you can best reformat the paper to suit your needs. That is what we do. We offer advice and guidance. We do not offer topic sentences to complete your work or any other area of writing that serves to make us do the work for you. We are not a writing service. If that is the service that you need then you are at the wrong place / forum. We are here to help you make your writing better and we do it for free. That means you still do the legwork in terms of research and actual writing. We merely help you improve what you have already done or correct any mistakes you made.
So as far as your topical sentences and the rest of your essay goes, you have to do that yourself because you are the only one who knows the background of your research, its related information, and the ultimate outcome of your research. As such, you should not find it difficult to deliver personally on the topical sentences because this is all part of the preliminary research that you did when you chose this literature to review.
