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Writing ielts task 1_ Diagram: The water cycle


lylong 2 / 1  
Aug 11, 2011   #1
Hi everyone, this is my first post, I hope i will have some feedback from you. It will help me a lot in my ielts test.

Thank you so much :D
This is link of diagram.

Water Cycle



This diagram below represents the continuous movement of water. A hydrologic cycle has seven steps before start one new cycle.
At first stage, water from ocean vaporizes and goes into air. It turns into gas and becomes tiny water vapor that can not be seen. Water vapor is lighter than air, so it takes the vapor up into the atmosphere. With the help of wind, these tiny vapor can go everywhere in global.

At second stage in the cycle, condensation will happen. Water vapor in the air gets cold and changes back into liquid, forming clouds. More and more water has condensed that the air cannot hold it anymore. The clouds get heavy and water falls back to the earth in the form of rain.

At the last stage, when water drops in surface, it carried downstream by rivers. Naturally, rivers flow into the sea, so water returns where it begin and one more new cycle starts again.

ekekek 25 / 51  
Aug 11, 2011   #2
I think you could add up more linkers in order to improve the fluency.

eg.At first stage, water from ocean vaporizes and goes into air.then, it turns into gas and becomes tiny water vapor that can not be seen.

Also, as you mentioned "seven steps", it should be clear pointed out in your essay instead of three stages in the main body.
oonguyenminh 3 / 3  
Aug 20, 2011   #3
This diagram below represents the continuous movement of water. A hydrologic cycle has seven steps before start one new cycle
I think you should omit "below"
has ->includes
start one new cycle -> the start of one new cycle

good luck :)
bangshws - / 2  
Sep 6, 2011   #4
yes i also agree that you should use the diagram below or above or whatever since in your answer, the people who are going to mark it will not see the diagram below like that. :) Cheers!


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