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Draw your future and control your life - TEDx



Bams17 28 / 38  
Oct 11, 2016   #1
Draw your future and control your life

Speaker of TED talked, not only active people who can draw the good dream, but also solitary as well. Leading your life design and get up from grave illness to the real life. Recently, most people in the world do not know what the aims of they do, approximately 40% people who know about purpose of their life. The speaker said, decided the best ways you should try to create your own vision with picture, because picture can be creating movement, not only that but also the picture can touch your heart.

For illustrates, the speaker created two pictures these were curent state and desired new reality, John had lovely wife and a lot of money but in the behind john does not felt happy because john had negative bos and any problem. Based on the picture john is in the current state, to get the best life john must be move to the new reality. After jo moved to the new reality he had new job, kind boss and jo had new children as well, not only that, but also john get new home, more conection and felt freedom.

What kind step to get success like john? The speaker explained, these were, the first is see it, the second is believe it and the last is action it. We have good brain and good imagination, so we should use it to get good life, strugle, get up and action every day.

ichanpants89 16 / 742  
Oct 11, 2016   #2
Bambang, the way you express your idea in the above writing is good and well-written. The flow of the ideas is closely related with each other as well. One thing that i would like to remind you is to be careful with using punctuation mark. There are some misuses of punctuation mark in the above essay as follows:

- Speaker of TED talked,that not only active (...) the good dream, but also solitary as well.
- ... what the aims of they do,and only approximately 40% of people who know about the purpose of their life.
- The speaker said, decided the best ways You should try to create your own vision with pictures to decide which way is the best to you,. This because picture can be creating movement, not only that but also the picture canencourage people to do something and touch your heart.

- For illustratesexamples ,...

In addition, please pay attention to the capitalization as well. The first letter in the name of people should be capitalized. This may look a minor problem but this can greatly affect one's writing, especially leaving certain impressions for the readers. Good luck with your next practice!


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