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Evaluation of sample introductions for some essay questions.



Faisal_Aceh 2 / 1  
Apr 7, 2015   #1
Task 2

Question

In the past, people usually stayed in one place throughout their life. These days, people often move around. They often live in several different places in their lifetime. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both?

Introduction

People have different views about their place. Some people think that they preferred to stay in one location for the rest of their life. Nowadays, many people who live in the differences area are more satisfaction. I strongly believe that staying in some places has many benefits for their life experience they have easier to gain a lot of information.

Question

Some people say that you can learn more about another country by watching television programmes and films about it than by actually visiting it.
How true is this statement? Is there anything you can learn about another country by visiting it that you cannot learn by watching programmes and films about it?

Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own experience.

Introduction

Some people believe that watching movie and television programs more effective to improve their knowledge about every country around the world. While others argued that statement and they said that being a visitor is one of the best ways to know all the customs immediately which is used by different countries. It is true that the journey to other regions gives us the real learning about anything.

Question

Some people say that modern buildings are ugly and are ruining our towns and cities, especially when these buildings are very different for those around them. Others say that they add variety and interest.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Introduction

People have different views about the buildings. Some people think that new innovation buildings are poor in quality and defacement which seems different with old buildings. While others believe that modern building is prettier and comfortable than original building. I honestly agree that fashionable buildings which is designed are worldwide.

lcturn87 - / 423  
Apr 7, 2015   #2
Introduction 1: Please make sure you discuss the disadvantages and how do they gain a lot of information from staying in one place. Make sure you keep this in mind for the essay.

Introduction 2: Your view is that when a person is immersed or learns about countries by traveling to those regions, this is more effective than watching television programs. Yet, you know that some may find it to be more effective to learn about countries by watching television programs and films. Find out if there is any truth to this and what can you learn by visiting. For example, if I learn about food in another country on t.v. is it different than when I am actually tasting it with a native of that country. What about clothes, seeing historic sites, the language, etc.

Introduction 3: I like this introduction. When you deface a building you make it bad. Is this what you want to say? When make comparisons between the two buildings make sure you use more comfortable. Do you think that newer buildings are better looking in design worldwide? This question is about towns and cities so you should probably change it to town and cities instead of worldwide.
thutyedaniel 32 / 28  
Apr 8, 2015   #3
Some people believe that watching movie and television programs (you should paraphrase) more effective to improve their knowledge about every country around the world. While others argued that statement and they said that being a visitor is one of the best ways to know all the customs immediately which is used by different countries. It is true that the journey to other regions gives us the real learning about anything (maybe you can make sure your hook)
irhame 52 / 47  
Apr 9, 2015   #4
one of best ways to know all the customs immediately


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