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expression of one's belief should not be refrained; freedom for artists



mishti 1 / 1  
Jan 6, 2013   #1
Creative artists should be given freedom to express their ideas (words, pictures, music and films. However some people think government should take some restriction with them. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give your reasons with own knowledge and give examples.

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Creative artists work are an expression of their beliefs and ideas. Often, government take offence of these art forms and ban them from getting published. Many feel that it is violation of their right to express themselves; however others believe that it is necessary to retain social stability.

Often, writers and artists produce work that are criticizing the government policies or traditions of the country. Government fears these art forms may hurt the sentiments of the people and cause resentments. Some work forms are so erratic in their content that they have potential to spark a revolution in a society. In these cases, government intervention may be essential to maintain the stability in the social infrastructure of the country.

On other hand, blocking these content forms mean violation of their right to speech and expression. In a democratic society, every one has a right to express themselves even if it means showing their discontentment against the society norms. Often, these art forms are good reality check for the country and may arose a change that could be beneficial. Therefore, government should show some degree of tolerance to these art forms and address that are reasonably raised through them.

To recapitulate, expression of one's belief should not be refrained. Allow the people of the society itself to decide whether they agree or disagree with the content. Therefore, government should exercise minimal control over the art forms as they could be a good reflection of the people's belief.

Th25cc 2 / 90  
Jan 6, 2013   #2
This is a rather tricky topic to write about. I'm not sure why a learning institution would like to know a particular political stance that you have (especially when that stance is most likely similar to that of others.. who doesn't support freedom of expression?).

I feel like there might a right way to answer this question. The learning institution may be looking to see that your beliefs align with theirs. Perhaps you could research the university in order to locate content that should exist in a superior answer.

While I thoroughly dislike the question, there are a few ways in which you can improve your existing essay.

Note that the prompt requests examples. I see no specific examples in your essay - you only included personal commentary.

Some work forms are so erratic in their content that they have potential to spark a revolution in a society. In these cases, government intervention may be essential to maintain the stability in the social infrastructure of the country.

I personally do not find that argument valid. You seem to be supporting a government's suppression of revolutionary ideas.

To recapitulate, expression of one's belief should not be refrained. Allow the people of the society itself to decide whether they agree or disagree with the content. Therefore, government should exercise minimal control over the art forms as they could be a good reflection of the people's belief.

Thesaurus overload! Recapitulate means "surrender again" and refrained is a verb - you are using it is a noun. Just put this last paragraph into plain, intelligent English. Let your content, not your superfluous wording, make you look intelligent.

I feel bad for you. The essay prompt is rough. Make sure to give examples through a well-structured, strongly opinionated essay.

Good luck! If you have any additional information to share, or if you have revised your essay, please re-post it!
OP mishti 1 / 1  
Jan 6, 2013   #3
Hi Th25cc,

Thanks for your valuable help. Even I am not too fond of the topic. Will rewrite the essay and post it again. Thanks.
dumi 1 / 6793  
Jan 6, 2013   #4
Creative artists work are an expression of their beliefs and ideas.

Creative works of the artists are an expression of their beliefs and ideas.

Often, government take offence of these art forms and ban them from getting published.

However, governments often take offence of some of these controversial art works and take action to ban them to prevent the public having access to such work.


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