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IELTS; Freedom, economics and education in China



qusay_75 1 / -  
Nov 30, 2013   #1
IELTS test in Thailand and New Zealand - October 2013 (Academic Module)
Most countries are compared by their economic success. Do you think there are some other important factors that need to be taken into consideration? Give your opinion and relevant examples

Economic is consider one of most important factor in the classification of the countries, I think nobody can deny or refuse this idea , but the peoples have many view points about assuming this factor, is this the only one to compare or there are another factors ?

In the first place, there are al lot of people believe economic must be the only thing to decide which countries is the best, because the economic has a power to change financial live for people by give them many opportunity for jobs, beside this economic can far away the problems of unemployment such like grime etc ,and the poor countries can be good example for this relationship between unemployment and grime.

But in second place, another people believes there are another factors must be put side by side with economic , like freedom, education, healthy and comfortable live for people. as example for this idea the second economic in the world I mean China have not enough freedom and many people in prison because their opinions while the best country for live is the Norway, and this country not in first or second even third in arrangement economic countries.

as a result , I think as we modern society we should look for new standards to choose which is the best country and this standard must have different factors like economic, freedom, education, healthy also pollution level , and result for these we can decide which country is the best ,also by this way we can push countries to do the best to them citizens.

Gulala 3 / 7  
Nov 30, 2013   #2
Economy is considered one of the most important factor in classification of countries... you have some grammar mistakes, recheck it...
tiyuok 4 / 16  
Dec 1, 2013   #3
there are al lot of people believe economic must be the only thing to decide which countries is the best, because the economic has a power to change financial live for people by give them many opportunity for jobs

there are al lot of people believe beliving that economic economy must be the only thing to decide which countries is the best, because the economic economy has a power to change financial live for people by give giving them many opportunity for jobs
Mandy Chan 1 / 2  
Dec 1, 2013   #4
Economic is considered as one of the most important factors in the classfication of countries. I think nobody will be against this idea. However, there are many people holding different points of view about this factor, while is this the only one taken into consideration or is there anyone else?
dumi 1 / 6793  
Dec 1, 2013   #5
Economic success is considered to be one of the most important factors in the classification of the countries.

but the peoples have many view points

... "peoples" is wrong. "people" is the plural form for collection of men/women.

but the peoples have many view points about assuming this factor, is this the only one to compare or there are another factors ?

This part is pretty confusing. :(
there are a lot of people who believe economic success must be the only thing to decide which countries is the best.
You need to pay attention to grammar. You can certainly improve your grammar with practice.


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