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Friendship does not have to be limited to people living and working around you anymore - CLEP Essays



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Nov 14, 2013   #1
Can you please help me out to by giving me tips on how to get Ideas on writing composition essays for CLEP.

I've tried to write an essay but I know i need lot of practice in order to clear this CLEP credit.

[i][b]Thanks to the Internet, the word "friendship" has a much broader meaning now. No longer are the bonds of friendship limited to telephone conversations, shared activites, or speaking face-to-face. In this day and age, very close friendships can be formed without the people ever meeting and by simply typing words on a screen.

Adapted from Sharon Hendricks, "A Broader Definition of Friendship"

Assignment: Is it easier now than ever before to form friendships? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your reasoning with examples taken from your reading, studies, experiences or observations.

In this 20th century everything has been transformed to electronic mode from basic day to day life activities for example ,from cooking food in microwave to using computers for communicating and dating. I agree that Introduction of this new internet era has completely reversed the meaning of friendship from regular face to face conversation and phone or texting communication to simply using computer screens .

Social media has been at accelerating age in today's fast paced and work oriented world. People in this modern era prefers to communicate through emails, chats , forums , etc in order of developing technology rather than using telephones, or mails . Social Sites like Facebook , twitter , AOL have been blooming this days and is been most acceptable and favorable source of communication between all kinds of ages of people. This sites and application allows people to connect more conveniently and easily throughout any part of the world. it gives you options for spending time with less cost effective and time saving options .

Friendship has different meaning in this era with a broader outlook and meaning. Technology has totally changed the meaning of friendship. people communicate through video chats and voice chats from applications like Skype, Google plus , Face time allowing them to bond more comfortably rather than meeting face to face . Meaning of friendship is at total different level due to this kind of programs allowing people to attach more effectively knowing each other more better.

Friendship does not have to be limited to people living and working around you anymore.

vangiespen - / 4077  
Sep 12, 2014   #2
Rucha, let me offer you some words of advice in order to help polish your essay. You have written some very good points. You just need to be guided on how to make it even better :-) I will restate your paragraphs in a way that I hope you will find to be a good example of how to better express your thoughts. After reading my suggestions, you can revise your essay using my guides so you can come up with a 2nd draft of the essay that we can further review. Don't worry about your grammar at this point. We will just concentrate on the message of your essay and how to deliver it :-)

In this 20th century everything has been transformed to electronic mode from basic day to day life activities for example ,from cooking food in microwave to using computers for communicating and dating. I agree that Introduction of this new internet era has completely reversed the meaning of friendship from regular face to face conversation and phone or texting communication to simply using computer screens .

- The 20th century has brought a whole new era of socializing to our world. Actual physical contact and proximity are no longer a requirement in order to build friendships. The internet has allowed people to transcend those previous barriers through its social media abilities. These days, everyone, even a complete stranger, can become a friend because you will be able to bond over something you have in common. Even if he is halfway across the globe.

- Rather than going direct to the point, it is always best to follow the basic rule of writing an essay, I-B-C. Introduction, Body, Conclusion. What I just wrote is your introduction to the essay.

Social media has been at accelerating age in today's fast paced and work oriented world. People in this modern era prefers to communicate through emails, chats , forums , etc in order of developing technology rather than using telephones, or mails . Social Sites like Facebook , twitter , AOL have been blooming this days and is been most acceptable and favorable source of communication between all kinds of ages of people. This sites and application allows people to connect more conveniently and easily throughout any part of the world. it gives you options for spending time with less cost effective and time saving options .

- This is a good first paragraph. You gave a general observation of how people interact in the age of the internet. However, It would be more effective if you can quote acceptable, and verifiable sources. Use academic journals if possible and be sure to quote the citation properly. This is a requirement that is stated in your essay prompt.

Friendship has different meaning in this era with a broader outlook and meaning. Technology has totally changed the meaning of friendship. people communicate through video chats and voice chats from applications like Skype, Google plus , Face time allowing them to bond more comfortably rather than meeting face to face . Meaning of friendship is at total different level due to this kind of programs allowing people to attach more effectively knowing each other more better.

- There is a lot of room for discussion development in this paragraph. You can mention your personal experience if you wish to as an example of how friendships are now built and are quite solid even though there is no actual presence involved in it.

Friendship does not have to be limited to people living and working around you anymore.

- Since this is your concluding paragraph, you need to build it up by restating your thesis and reminding the reader of the reasons supporting your stand.


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