Writing Task 1 - The graph below and the chart on the next page show the answers people gave

The graph below and the chart on the next page show the answers people gave about the extent to which they are satisfied with their lives and what they think would make them happiest.

The graph provides information about satisfaction with life according to different age and the chart is about things that make people happy across age groups. Overall, it can be seen that the least happiness occur in young age by having money, while money for older people do not make them happy.

In the beginning, both men and women have different satisfying score when men's score is 5.5 and women's score is 5.3. After that, they have similar pattern in 21-30 age group until reach a bottom in 41-50 age group with score 5. In the following years, the trend is upward and hit a high point at 5.6 for everyone age 61-70.

Young people say that money make them happy and decrease sharply in the following age group. On the other hand, health begins from the bottom at about 10 percent and increase to above 40 percent in age more than 75. There is a cross in age group 45-54 between health and money to make people happy.

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hello, here is my advice for your writing:

1. The line graph provides (...) to different age andwhile the chart is about things ...

2. ... happiness occur in young agepeople by having money, while money for older people do not ...

3. ... different satisfying score whenwhich is 5.5 for men and 5.3 for women ..... men's score is 5.5 and women's score is 5.3.

4. .....reach a peak a high point at 5.6 for everyone between age 61 and 70 year..........

I think you did it wel, good luck...and keep writing

Hai Mardian! here are my suggestions for you

... least happiness occuroccurs in young age ...

while money for older people dodoes not make them happy.

..... until reachreaching a bottom in 41-50 ...

you are good in writing mardian :)
but, it will be better if you separate each paragraph clearly.

Hi Mardian, I have a few suggestions for your essay;

- ... information about the satisfaction rating ofwith life according
- ... be seen that the least happiness occur in young
- agepeople are happier by having money,
- ... older people does not make them happy.

- After thatHowever , they have similar
- pattern in 21-30 age group until it reaches thea bottom in 41-50 ...
- ..., the trend is upward and has hit a high point atof 5.6 for everyone

- and this has decreased sharply
- health issues begins from the bottom
- inat the age or more than 75.
- There is a cross in age group of 45-54 between

There you have it Mardian,I hope the above remarks are helpful to your revision and overall, the analysis only needs minor modifications and this should help enhance your analysis.