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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meats in a Euro countries



Le Nhung 1 / -  
Dec 7, 2024   #1
The chart provide information about the intake four kinds of meats, include fish,beef,chicken and lamb in European nations over a course of 25 years.
From an overall perspective, it is evident that the quantity of chicken consumed in European nations have a big change betwen 1974 and 2004,majority showed an upward trend, whereas a reverse pattern could be seen in the figure for the remaining types of food over the years shown.
In 1984, the number of beef consumed had an explosion increase compared previous years and got the hightest at 240, the next was chicken with the amount of chicken consumed at 150 grams per person per week. The third was lamb and fish consumed reach the bottom.
After reaching a peak of around 240 grams in 1984, the consumption of beef gradually fell to somewhere in the vicinity of 100 grams in 2004. Wth the increase of each year, The quantity of chicken consumed reached a maximum at 250 in 2004. In contrast, the period from 1979 to 2004 saw a constant decrease in fish and lamb consumed,and reaching the lowest point of 50 grams for fish

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15461  
Dec 9, 2024   #2
While the word count is acceptable at 190 words, the essay is still not well presented. The summary overview is incomplete as it does not include the type of chart provided. The generic reference to "a chart" does not earn extra points because the reader will be left confused regarding the type of chart image that was provided. This will cause deductions in the GRA scoring section. Then, the content of the image is misrepresented as
include fish,beef,chicken and lamb
when there are only 4 types of meat specified in the chart. There are no other inclusions. This created not only confusion regarding the image content, but also provided inaccurate information to the reader. This will cause deductions in the TA and C+C sections of the reporting essay. These preliminary deductions are indicative of a non passing analysis task 1 essay.


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