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The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the UK in 2013 & 2014


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May 9, 2022   #1

Summarize the chart information



The bar chart illustrates how many jobless women in some nations of United Kingdom between 2013 and 2014.

Overall, there was a decline in the percentage of unemployed women in both years. In addition, the proportion of unemployed women in the year 2013 was generally higher compared to the figure for unemployed females in England, Wales, Scotland and Northern Ireland in 2014

In 2013, the share of women who are jobless in England was at 6.8%, higher than that of unemployed women in Scotland and Northern Ireland, at 6.1% and 5.6% respectively. Meanwhile, Wales had the lowest unemployment rate of women among the four nations (5.4%).

In the following year , Scotland surpassed all four countries and had the highest unemployment rate, at 6.7%. Conversely, the rate of unemployed females in Northern Ireland was the lowest (4.6%), lower than that of unoccupied women in England and Wales at 6.5% and 5% respectively.

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May 10, 2022   #2
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