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India's grand plan to create world's longest river set to go



Pramudia27 34 / 52  
Dec 1, 2016   #1
India's grand plan to create world's longest river set to go

India plan to make the massive connection river in the world which never made before. This river connection is estimated that it will have twice distance of nil river which is trough 30 vast river and about 3000 dam. However, this construction bring about drawback that it will threaten livelihoods and endanger wildlife based on research of geologist and ecologist in India during constructing this project, it will destroy the ecosystem.

On the other hand, scientists in India have found about clime change during these days, and it make drought in some areas in India. Furthermore, water shifting in main dam in India has decreased by the time, eventhough it is followed by increasing water supply in other dam. this condition is predicted to always continue until uncertain time.

yurikeyuri 43 / 49  
Dec 2, 2016   #2
Hello Pram, let me give my correction for you

India planplans to make (India is singular noun, use singular verb too)

about 3000 damdams(because plural noun)

it makemakes drought ("it" is singular verb, so use singular verb too)

eventhougheven though

... increasing water supply in otheranother dam

thank you
ifraanisa05 44 / 67  
Dec 2, 2016   #3
hi pram. here are my suggestions for you

India plan to make the massive connection ...
An invention of massive connection in river has been planned in India

However, this construction bringbringsabouta drawback

... in India have found aboutthatclimeclimate change

and it makemakes drought in some areas in India.

increasing water supply in other dam dams
Ikhlasul iman00 1 / 4  
Dec 2, 2016   #4
hy friend.

Indiahas ( If you use (plan), you can use (has/have) plan to make ...


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