As the saying says, "Mens sana in corpore sano", I agree with this saying that people with a great mind would have a healthy body.
Yes, I agree with niesaysi :) If your quote is in any language other than English, then you should give the translation. Otherwise your quote would not have any value or effect :)
You do it with this sentence;
, I agree with this saying that people with a great mind
wouldshould have a healthy body.
... however, it is not very clear to the reader that this is the meaning of it :)
Anyway, a good start :)....
The structure dumi has provided is kind of one fit for all which help you come out with a decent introduction without missing out features that you need to earn marks.
Yes, this is what exactly I wish :)
The aim is to have some advice and meaningful feedback, whether I have already aligned with the structure above or not.
It doesn't matter your introduction structure is slightly different from what I have suggested. However, it needs to contain those features :D
This is why school aims to teach their schoolchildren sports, but not as the competitive ones defined in terms of both team and individual
This is not adequately describing the issue. You need to be a little more descriptive because this is the most important part of your introduction.