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toefl essay "large or small company"



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Nov 8, 2009   #1
Although many people dream of working for a large company, as other youths accept challenge, I prefer to be an employee of a small company for a number of reasons. A small company may increase my abilities in full scale, offer precious experience and realize my ambition about my own company.

Firstly, my abilities of working are fully developed in a small company. There usually does not have enough employees, so I may have to work in a number of different rules. For example, if I work in a small factory, I have to know not only about material or about production, but also I may have knowledge about business or management. As a result, that will make me to improve myself to complete my work.

Secondly, when I choose a small company, it means I choose challenge. A small company as an incomplete machine with many problems, become missions that I have to pass. Sometime, I may be fail, but it leaves for me precious experiences from that I can learn how to solve other problems in the future.

Finally, there is truth nobody refuse is my position is elevated in a small company. At least, my ideas are listened and my decisions make more affects to the activities of the company. I freely talk and do everything I think it good for my company. On the contrary, I only try to finish all work received from my boss passively. That is boring.

In conclusion, working in a small company is really challenge, only reserve people who ready to face everything. In spite of difficulties, it may improve me by knowledge and experience, lead succeed in the future.

EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Nov 9, 2009   #2
After the first sentence, you should add 2 more sentences to the first paragraph. Add a sentence that lists the three points you are going to make in this essay, and then add a sentence that tells your main idea.

However, that is not part of showing how well you write in English. For improving your mistakes, follow Katurday's excellent advice. Do you have any questions about it?

Let's see another writing sample! :-)


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