So as everybody else, I went boulevarding.
At the end of the first paragraph I am wondering why this is worth writing about. It would be good to add a thesis statement after this sentence above.
Reflecting
back on my first encounter of boulevarding, I remember...
Apparently, SMU had a rule allowing the consumption of alcohol by students under the supervision of their parents. ----Is this actually true? Were adults providing alcohol to minors??
Opposed
by to this decision, I believe
that students who are
of underage should not be allowed ...
If we
cannot even verify the supervision of parents for these freshman then what can we say about their actions? ---well, let them drink. That is how natural selection works, I guess. It's too bad, though.
Never use "that" in this situation.
Students may reply,
that "Well my parents are with me so it is
okay ."
Well, what is the message of the essay? That you oppose underage drinking? I think you can make a connection between this issue and your careers of interest. What can you do with your life to improve situations like this...what will you do? :-)