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Writing task 1: The line graph and table show the average monthly temperatures and annual hours



amber99999 1 / -  
Feb 25, 2024   #1
The line graph and table show the average monthly temperatures and annual hours of sunshine in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph and table illustrate the temperatures on the monthly average and sunshine's annual hours in selected cities. In general, the number of London's temperatures is similar to the figure for New York's ones, while the number of the monthly temperatures in Sydney differs from them. It is also seen that the number of sunshine's hours in New York and Sydney is high significantly, which is higher than it for sunshine's London hours.

Regarding to the graph, the nunber of the New York temperature soars in the first seven months, reaching the highest at 30 degrees. London city also witnesses a rather remarkable increase of the temperatures at this time, at 25 degrees, but it has a slight fluctuation between May and July. Although rising strongly from July to December, the figure for temperatures of two destinations plummets, and London's hit the lowest, at 5 degrees. By contrast, it in Sydney is different from the others. From January to July, it moderately drops by around 8 degrees, marginally fluctuating between January and March. However, in the final months, going up fairly, it reaches approximately at 26 degrees.

In term of the given table, the figure for sunshine's yearly hours in New York is the most considerable at 2535 hours, following by the number for 33them in Sydney at 2473 hours. They are nearly twice as high as the figure for the hours of sunshine in London. In this city, it just has 1158 sunshines's hours.


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Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15461  
Feb 27, 2024   #2
There are 2 separate images, the reference to the information of the images must be separate also. It is confusing to read the first sentence since it combines information about the images, without an actual reference to each image. The summary overview must clearly state what is in each image because the information refers to different comparison points.

Use less words to provide a summarized analysis of the images. Writing almost 300 words within 20 minutes is next to impossible during the actual test. The ability to quickly state and analyze information is necessary in an English based classroom since short quizzes and recitations are based on that premise. There was no need to use such a wordy analysis in this case.
sophiemoore62 4 / 10  
Feb 29, 2024   #3
In general, ... which is higher than it for sunshine's London hours.

I think this can be shortened into just one sentence and you should only mention the most significant feature (like the highest/lowest), don't compare just yet.


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