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The main purpose of universities is to give info and skill to fullfill requirement for work-force



Amirulmumin 2 / 2  
Mar 16, 2016   #1
Some individuals believe that the primary goal universities should be to provide information and skill needed for future work. others however feel that the main objective of universities is to give students access to knowledge for its own values regardless if the information is usefull for a job or not.

what, in your opinion, should be the primary objective if university education? give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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The main purpose of universities is to give information and skill to fullfill requirement for work-force. Opponents, the main of universities is to provide education without knowing. If the education is usefull for a job or useless. In my point, i agree if the main purpose of universities is to give information, skill and how to fullfill requirement for work-force.

Getting job is main purpose for students who have finished study from their university. In university, they will learn some lessons and get many knowledges. Ussualy lessons that they will get are appropriate with their career because university provides many majors that they can choose a major what they want. The major will direct students to take them into their career, but in another case, university just teaches more theory than practice, because of that, the students should think how to practice or apply about their knowledge in reality. They do not need to blame university but the students should realize what they should do.

Nowadays, it is difficult to find a job for fresh graduate, some students that have graduate's argu, the recent education system is not suitable with the requirement that is company needed. The system education nowadays does not refer to requirement of the job,but the other students said the recent education system still makes the students have many knowledge, that they have gotten as important as the former education system, something that makes a difference is how to deliver the material to the student by new method. It depends on the students, how to apply the knowledge that they have.

The conclusion is we should realize that we have gotten now is because of university. University makes our mindset better. We have many knowledge that make ourselves have wide-view. We know what we have to do because university makes us mature enough. We can deal with the pressure, we can cooperate with our friends in the team. Those that we do not realize are the one of requirement of work-force

RAY93 35 / 166  
Mar 26, 2016   #2
hi, amirulmukminin. as you can see there are many corrections i made for your essay. keep writing.
to fullfill requirement for work-force. ,misspelling

Opponents, the main of universities is --> the main goal, purpose, aim, etc
to provide education without knowing --> what does this meant?

.If the education is usefull for a job or useless.incomplete sentence, misspelling

Inmy point, i agree if the main purpose of universities is to give information, skill and how to fullfill requirement for work-force.need to paraphrase rather than used the same words in same paragraph.

Getting job is main purpose for students who have finishedhad finished/finished
study from their university.their study from university

In university,need article

they will learn some lessons and get many knowledges.knowledge =uncountable

Ussualy lessons that they will get are appropriate with their career because university provides
many majors that they can choose a major what they want.

The major will direct students to take apply them into their career, but in another case, university just teaches more theory than practice, university and lecturer --> lecture not teach

Nowadays, it is difficult to find a job for fresh graduate, some students that have graduate's argu had graduated argue,

the recent education system is not suitable with the requirementthat is company needed. The system education nowadays does not refer to requirement of the job,but the other students said the recent education system still makes the students have many knowledge, obviously redudancy

The conclusion is we should realize that we have gotten nowis because of university.
We know what we have to do to do what? because university makes us mature enough.


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