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Is modern life better for human?



Minh Chau 2 / 3  
May 9, 2016   #1
The moment that human is living plays an important role in life's quality. So there are several reasons to disagree that the more modern human becomes, the easier human live. It will the focus on my essay.

First, cost-living increases rapidly in the modern life than the past. It creates the difficulty for people to pay necessary product. For example, when my mother was young, she could live comfortably with one million dong per month. However, now she has to earn tenfold than she did in the past to pay electric bills, eating, transport and entertainment. Therefore, the modern the life is, the more people have to work hard.

Secondly, modern life not only creates the negative effect in human life but also impacts on other species. The development of science and technology in modern life creates a lot of problems in environment. For example, the growth of machines and factory usually causes the air and water pollution. The plots of forest was been replaced by houses and skyscrapers. Thereby, the number of rare animal declines and some of them become extinct because they lost their habitant. Therefore, the modern is not only makes the human life become harder but also has the same effect on others.

In summary, although some people will claim that the achievement in modern society will help human life become better, I still believe that the disadvantage outweighs the advantage. However, the consciousness of human will decide what their life will be, include becoming better or worse.

aldicho 1 / 1  
May 10, 2016   #2
1. Last sentence; second paragraph
Therefore, the modern the life is, the more people have to work hard.
I think you should add object after is . Or you may simply say: Therefore, in modern life, people have to work harder.

2. Last sentence; third paragraph
Therefore, the modernis not only makes the human life become harder but also has the same effect on others.
No need to writeis since you use present simple tense. And the existence of become is not necessary.

3. First sentence; last paragraph
I still believe that the disadvantageoutweighs the advantage
I suppose you write more than one so it should be "disadvantagesoutweigh the advantages

Overall, You have exquisite ideas and those ideas are written in a great manner. These few little flaws I mentioned above wouldn't be a serious problems.
tria25 12 / 18  
May 10, 2016   #3
hallo Minh Cau. let me show my opinion in correcting this writing.

... plays an important role in life's quality. Sounformal there are several reasons to disagree... It will the focus on my essay.without saying this, your overview has explained that you will disagree with the statemet

it is better if you explain some reasons which agree with it, then you broke them with your strong reason (s) of why should disagree.

warm regard


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