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IELTS: Nature of Holidays is changing, do you agree or disagree



shaddy 17 / 40  
May 28, 2013   #1
According to those in the travel business, the nature of the average 'holiday' is changing. Rather than seeking a relaxing break in a far-away place, people now want exitement on their holidays and are keen to participate in unusual and challenging activities.

Do you agree or disagree?

Holidays are important because they provide a break from work. In the past, people used to enjoy the break by going to a relaxing place in abroad, but these days many travel agents believe that this trend has been reduced. People are found more interested in spending the holidays in some exciting activity such as competitions and outdoor camping. I agree with the view and in rest of the essay I shall provide reasons to support my argument.

First, the modern work pattern has great impact on the nature of spending holidays these days. As now the usual day activities at work are more challenging, so this changes people's behaviour towards other activities which they carry in their daily life. For example, people are more competent at work and they prefer to excel in many things at a time. These people do not let their spirit die during holidays. Instead they join competitions of their interests to boost their confidence level. Dancing, singing, racing and cycling are some of the examples of the activities that are carried in order to raise the confidence level.

Secondly, the increasing cost of travel and visit to quiet, calm and peaceful place is also a reason behind the trend. The hotels are so expensive that families cannot think of going there. Moreover, these places have high cost of living for other matters as well such as food and travelling etc. Mostly people who save money throughout the year do not wish to spend their savings for the luxury of few days.

To summarize, after insight into the reasons I believe that many people are avoiding visits to relaxing places and involving into challenging activities these days.

dumi 1 / 6795  
May 28, 2013   #2
Holidays are important because they provide a break from work

...yes ofcourse. :)

In the past, people used to enjoy thetheir breaks by going to a relaxing place in abroad, but these days many travel agents believe that this trend has beenis reduced.

In the past, travelling abroad has been one of the most popular leisure activity of people. However, today, many travel agents believe that this trend is on a sharp decline.

People arehave found more interested in spending their holidays in some exciting activity such as competitions and outdoor camping.

Your follow the right essay structure and good writing skills.... Good Luck!
Shumaila86 11 / 31  
May 29, 2013   #3
hi shaddy, good work...i am also preparing for IELTS. I am working hard, but cant get enough in writing. Can ye help me how to gather ideas in most effective way? Please also tell me how u practiced? thanx
OP shaddy 17 / 40  
May 29, 2013   #4
I am in the same boat and trying to get the intended band. I've known from many people that key to get intended band in writing is following the right structure and practicing as many essays as you can. In fact I've seen a couple of my friends who scored their band just by doing untiring writing practices.

Honestly speaking, I can not state with certainty if the blind practices can bring good reward or not as I'm just practicing and haven't done the real test for long time. I'll be taking a real test in a couple of weeks, perhaps after the result I could be more confident in shaping a strategy and letting you know the best practice.

Good luck for the exam.

Regard
S


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