Obamacare: Heading Down? (against the health care programs promoted)

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Prompt: Write an essay arguing whether you support or are against the health care programs promoted by Mr.Obama (500~600 words)

Obamacare: Heading Down?

So-called Obamacare, Mr Obama's presidency has brought a new collection of policies regarding welfare to America. His policy for all-citizen medical care is now enacted, but something new doesn't always mean that it is good. It is bound to head towards failure because of its extremity, lack of public support, and inapplicability to various social class.

First of all, Obama's health care is too radical for sustainable maintenance. A new policy has to be introduced gradually, especially for a country with a large population like America to make sure every details of the policy is going to be effective. It needs to take steps by steps to gradually form the shape of the policymaker's ideal. However, enacting a policy all at once as Mr. Obama is doing is risking America to countless side effects. This case of medical care is parallel to many other policies that were too radically enforced and laid many side effects, such as the case of Britain's current prime minister, who proposed to radicalize Britain but only had his ratings lowered.

Second, the policy is not supported by public opinion. Citing the poll done by the ABC news, only an approximately 40 percent of US citizens proposed to believe that Mr Obama would do a better job of handling health-care reform than Republicans, and the same for vice versa. As it has been the traditional spirit of American people to be self-reliant, laissez-faire was their idea, as opposed to Mr Obama and the Democratic party. The bill, on the other hand, could be passed due to an over-majority of Democrats in the congress, but apparently not many people are pleased with it. The principle of indirect democracy impels the congressmen to represent the opinions of the American citizens. However, to push the medical care against the public's opinion is only to show a sign of dogmatism and to incur conflict and political unrest, like the candlelight protests in South Korea. The policy should not be implemented until it is mended to gain popular support.

Finally, Mr.Obama's health care plan is a one-way solution that can not satisfy all ingredients in the salad bowl. America is a country of diversity, which means every members of the society have different needs according to their social class. To the more affluent, a health insurance may not be necessary but may think it only as a waste of their tax. To the extremely poor a medical insurance may even not be enough to make it affordable for them. The idea of an all-citizen medical insurance is a result of ignorance to American diversity.

Obamacare, especially health care, is an improbable approach to improving the health of American citizens. The idea of an all-citizen health care plan is an ignorant decision that is too risky, not supported by the people, and inflexible to diversity. It's time for the democratic party and Obama to take a look back at their policy.

Hi,

In the third paragraph, add ly i.e Second(ly)

Finally, Mr.Obama's health care plan is a one-way solution that can not satisfy all ingredients in the salad bowl. America is a country of diversity, which means every member(s) of the society have different needs according to their social class.

To the extremely poor a medical insurance may (even) ..not needed, please delete not be enough to make it affordable for them.

Usually, we become informed first, and write an essay second.

...is risking America to countless side effects.----In order to make this a good sentence, change risking to "putting America at risk for countless..."

... to radicalize Britain---This is not the correct way to writ it. Do you mean to say that he has involved government in health care?

The bill, on the other hand, could be passed--The bill has already passed, and it is now a law.

Obamacare, especially health care,---What do you mean here?

It's time for the democratic party and Obama to take a look back at their policy.--It is time for you to look at the policy. You have not gathered information prior to writing this essay? If you have not gathered information, you must be just repeating the ideas given to you by other people. When you write something, it is important not to go outside the bounds of what you know. Only write what you know. It is good that you cited a poll, and I think you should include more information like that. But in order to write in a persuasive way, the most important thing is to keep your claims limited to what you can support. So... write about the solid, sure information you have.

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Affordable Care act (Obamacare) Yes, or no?

I'm not a great writer, and would love some assistance with my essay. I've started out with my intro. I'm not really satisfied with it. My thesis should support whether I am for or against obamacare. The body should explain my thesis, right? The essay shouldn't be more than 2 pages. Anyone can give me their output? Thanks in advance

Is Obamacare good or bad for the American public? This issue is still very much debatable. With the expense of accumulating more debt, the passing of the bill will provide the underprivileged with quality care they need, and a sense of security. I'm a firm supporter that everyone deserves adequate health care.

You should look at the advantages and disadvantages of Obamacare then come up with a stronger thesis which will guide you through to the conclusion.