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'opinions regarding world culture' - essay for TOEFL



asdasd 3 / 2  
Mar 29, 2012   #1
[i] Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Modern technology is creating a single world culture. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.[/i]

There are many different opinions regarding world culture. Some people think that all the countries in the world cannot have a single culture. However, in my view, a single modern culture is being created by modern technology for the following reasons.

Firstly, most of the countries have the same educational system based on technology. Teachers give topics to the students who should research on the internet to find data, and then students should type their research by using computer and even give a presentation by using PowerPoint. For example, students who are studying in Iran use the same software, Microsoft, to type their homework or have presentation compared to Canadian students.

Secondly, new technology has created some similar jobs all around the world. Computer technology is a growing job in most of the countries, and students are being encouraged to study in this field. For example, many immigrants in Canada who have the degree in computer technology fields can easily go to Canadian universities and find jobs with good salaries. This example shows that jobs that are related to technology are in demand in most of the countries.

Some people might argue that there are some cultures such as making foods which are unicq in each culture, and technology cannot affect them. This point has some merits on the surface; however, many countries such as Canada, the USA, and British have many restaurants which serve many foods form different countries and cultures. In fact, cooks can find many new food recipes easily on the Internet. For example, two days ago, I went to a Canadian restaurant, and I ate noodle, sushi, which are Chinese foods, and Greek salad.

To sum up, new technology has affected cultures of the world, and we can see many similarities in many cultures. In fact, new technology has influences on educational system, jobs and foods in the world.

Athena - / 82  
Mar 30, 2012   #2
Hi,

I read through your essay. I found that there is a little contradiction in the essay. It might probably make the essay stronger if you stick to one side of the argument and support it with examples.


Teachers give topics to the students who should research on the internet to find data, and then students should type their research by using a computer and even give a presentation by using PowerPoint.

Some people might argue that there are some cultures such as making foods which are unicqunique in each culture, and technology cannot affect them.

Nice approach to the essay though =)

All the Best!
trang 4 / 5  
Mar 30, 2012   #3
Some people might argue that there are some cultures such as making foods which are UNIQUE in each culture, and technology cannot affect them.
i think your last sentence should restate the topic to make it stronger. You can write:
To sum up, modern technology isn't creating a single culture, but creating a multicultural society in our planet.
peterc 14 / 52  
Apr 11, 2012   #4
Hi asdasd,

I agree with trang on the last paragraph. It is a bit abrupt to finish the essay in this way. I think the tone of concluding paragraph should be similar to that of the beginning (or the initial stand), otherwise it will lose integrity. I hope my opinion could help.


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