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Overweight mothers give birth to biologically older babies



Bams17 28 / 38  
Oct 18, 2016   #1
Overweight mothers give birth to biologically older babies

Woman who are obeses while pregnant having impact which related to the their babies healty. There is big corelation between overweight pregnant women and their kids. The effect is their babies ageing 10 years older than normal babies. In addition, the babies sceptible get more deseas from their mother, such as diabetes and atherosclerosis.

According to the research, there is corelation between people biologicals and telomeres lingking to the DNA. On the other hand, team of research invent fascinating finding that the babies from overweight women expected 10 years older than the babies from healthy women, it causes that the fat in our body can prompt the inflammation, and give reactive chemicals can threatening cells and shorten telomeres.

Source: newscientist.com/article/2109327-overweight-mothers-give-birth-to-biologically-older-babies/

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15404  
Oct 18, 2016   #2
This summary is full of problems. Part of the problem with your work is that you use the wrong terms and descriptions within the essay. I can see that you understand the meaning of the word you want to use. Now, all you have to do is connect the right term with the right meaning. Let me show you those problems:

Woman WOMEN (PLURAL FORM)who are obeses (THE SINGULAR AND PLURAL FORM ARE THE SAME FOR THIS WORD)
while pregnant having impact which related to the their babies healty IMPACT THEIR UNBORN CHILD'S HEALTH.
There is big A corelation CO-RELATION between overweight
... is their babies ageing 10 years older FASTER than ...
babies sceptible get more deseas ARE MORE SUSCEPTIBLE TO GENETIC ILLNESSES from their mother,...

... is A corelation CO-RELATION between people biologicals HUMAN BIOLOGICAL and telomeres lingking to the DNA. BIOLOGICAL MAKEUP, TELOMERES, AND THEIR DNA.
... team of researchS DISCOVERED FASCINATING INFORMATION invent fascinating finding that ...
women expected 10 years older HAD BABIES THAT AGED 10 YEARS FASTER than the babies ...
it causes that the fat in our body can prompt the inflammation, and give reactive chemicals can threatening cells and shorten telomeres.
BODY FAT CAN CAUSE INFLAMMATION AND CAUSE AN INTERNAL CHEMICAL REACTION THAT THREATENS CELLS AND SHORTENS TELOMERES.

Now, you also have a problem with the way you state the facts in your summary. The original article contains data that is not included, but is very important in this summary. When summarizing factual or data evident work, you must always include the numbers / percentages when you write your summary. These digits help to create a more informative summary and also gives it a more authoritative stance. Since your current work lacks those information, then the work cannot be considered to be an actual informative summary.


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