Summary of Do Schools Kill Creativity by Sir Ken Robinson
There are no people born with creativity in their mother stomach. Pablo Picasso, one of the biggest artist in modern era, is not born with creativity, he grown up with. In some opportunity at TED Talk, education practitioner, Sir Ken Robinson talks about why creativity is being unessential subject in our curriculum. He, moreover, released education syllabus putting linguistic and mathematic are the top of the subject list, on other words, it means pupils should have a standard knowledge to be success in their future. By contrast, humanism and creativity are being the bottom of the priority. School has killing creativity as a major-league subject.
Furthermore, schools thought being wrong is some student mistakes in teaching life. Disagree for this statemen Sir Robinson thought if student afraid being wrong they cannot learn to being original. It is all about capacity and commitment; if schools want to teach their student with depend their intelligent on account of in the fact that every student has different ability intelligence. For simple example that some adolescent clever in art and other in math. Sir Robinson believes in next era we should to adapt new conception of human ecology to take creativity as a major design of our curriculum.
Dear alfa, there are some advices for your writing, feel free to correct me,
There are no people born with creativity since they are still in their mother stomach
mathematic as the top in the subject list
Hope it helps to improve your writing,
Regards
Hi alfa7
here are my review towards your essay
Pablo Picasso, one of the biggest artistartists in modern era,...
In some opportunityopportunities at TED Talk, (an) education practitioner, ...
... linguistic and mathematic(s) are the top of (...) it means (i think you missed the conjunction here)that pupils should have ...
... and creativity are being(you can find some collocations / synonym for this word) the bottom of the priority. School has killingkilled creativity as a ...
Furthermore, schools thought [you should put conjunction here] being wrong is some student(s) mistakes in teaching life. [i do not quite understand the meaning of this sentence]
Disagree for this statement(wrong spelling)[you should put comma here] Sir Robinson thought if student afraid of[you missed the collocation] being wrong they cannot learn to beingbe[to + Vbi] original.
... teach their student with dependdepend on[collocation for depend is on ] their intelligent on ...
... that some adolescent(s) clever in art and other(s) in math. Sir Robinson believes in (the) next era we should to adapt new conception concept of human ...
suggestion :
mr alfa7 you should watch you SVA, and basic grammar to improve your essay
i hope it will make your essay better.
good luck :)
Dear friend
You wrote: ... with creativity in their mother stomach.
Revise: ''in their mothers' stomach''.
You wrote: ... knowledge to be success in their future.
You need a plural form when there is more than one future. Revise: ''futures''
You wrote: ... in next era we should to adapt new conception ...
Don't put 'to' between "should" and "adapt". Did you mean ''we should adapt''?
