The population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011.

cycling commuters by gender and age

Question: The table below shows the percentage of the population by age groups in one town who rode bicycles in 2011.
Answer:
The table illustrates the number of population of one town who rode bicycles in 2011, according to five age groups.
Overall, the ratio of female who ride bicycle gained in popularity more than that of male. However, both of women and men, who aged from 0 to 9 year old, was most interested in riding bicycles.

In 2011, females aged 0 - 9 year old topped the list at (51.3), followed by the ages of 10 to 17 years old (42.2). The figures for the 18-39 and over 60 shared a similar pattern, between 17.1 and 18.5. At the bottom place was aged from 40 to 59 year old (12.3).

In terms of males, the age group 0-9 held the lion's share (50.3), which is 25.7 higher than the second rank - the age 10 -17 year old boys. The proportion of the age 60 over interested in riding bicycles is 13.2. The number of cycling commuters (the age 18-39 year old) made up 9.7, which was slightly higher than that of the age 40-59 year old, a difference of 1,7%.

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