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Production off Co2 and other greenhouse gas has a heating effects on the atmosphere



Vu Tammm26 1 / -  
Aug 6, 2018   #1
Production off Co2 and other greenhouse gas has a heating effects on the atmosphere and results in global warming.
Why global warming is considered one of the most serious issues nowadays.
How can be solved?


CO2 and other greenhouse gases effect



In these days, global warming has been a top priority in many parts of the world, mainly caused by CO2 and other greenhouse gases. Although there are undoubtedly various problems of this trend, measures can be taken to address these potential consequences.

Several related negative effects could be anticipated as the result of global warming. The prime issue is extreme weather events. An increase in average temperatures of the Earth would be expected to lead to extreme weather other than cold and heat weather. In other words, various natural disasters such as hurricane, earthquake, boiling drought and unpredictable flood would pose a threat to people. Another pressure would come from the extinction off endangered species. Forest degradation, as a result of global warming, can force animals and plants to be extinct because the shortage of shelters, food and water.

It is imperative that concrete steps should be taken to combat this trend. Governments, especially world leaders of many developed countries should joint hand to conduct the best regulations and policies mitigating the negative effects of global warming and also reducing man- made disasters. For individuals, people can conserve electrical energy and minimize the emissions which is one of key factors resulting in global warming. It can be done by turning off the unused devices and taking advantages of public transports rather than their private cars.

Overall, while adverse consequences are apparent, feasible measures can be taken to address this problem.

sillyman2000 19 / 42  
Aug 6, 2018   #2
Hi. Good essay. However, there are several mistakes that you need to consider:
- If I were to write your first sentence in your opening, I'd say: "Global warming has been a major concern in various parts of the world and CO2 emission and greenhouse gas are the primary causes for this."

- Also your second opening sentence does not answer the prompt. I'd say: Despite the various components that worsening the problems, there are introduced measures to address the consequences.

-An increase in average temperatures of .... This sentence is not really clear. Maybe you're trying to say:The sudden heating up in the temperatures is expected to lead to extreme weather patterns, either too cold or too hot..

-extinction off. Typo mistake I guess
-world leaders
-"... and policies to the negative effects ..."
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15386  
Aug 7, 2018   #3
Tam, you have written only 240 words indicating that you are short of the minimum word count by 10 words. Expect to receive point deductions for this error. In an actual test, it could prevent you from getting a passing score. Mostly because there are also other errors that you made in the essay writing which further reduced your scoring consideration. For example, this is a direct question essay but you did not respond to the essay in a direct manner within the prompt paraphrase. Instead, you approached it as an opinion essay discussion. The difference between the two discussion methods are these:

1. Direct Question - requires a response as part of the thesis statement at the end of the paraphrase
2. Opinion essay. No direct response in the paraphrase, only an explanation of the discussion instruction is required.

The method by which you approach the prompt paraphrase will have a direct and serious effect on your TA score. Your C&C score will be affected by the fact that in your paragraphs, you only offer reasons, but no explanations for each reason. Try to present and thoroughly support the reason with not only an explanation, but also an example to prove the line of reasoning you have presented.

The concluding summary also does not find proper representation in this essay. You have a single line that does not summarize the given topic, discussion points, and suggested solutions, all of which are required for the composition of a concluding summary paragraph.


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