short essay for review for police test

Thanks everbody for time in advance. I am preparing police test so please all kind of reviews are welcome. This is my first time posting and essay is preety small as well.

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Customer Service

Providing customer service is the main responsibility for every business in market. Customer service is not about giving smile, assistance in finding products and putting some people at a counter with a big customer service board.

Real customer service is far more than that. But i believe is businesses should be responsible for purchased product for at least one year. Within a year product should be denied of taking back unless it has been used pretty rough.

Greetings!

I'd be happy to give you some input!

You have several nouns which require an article (a, an or the), and I've made some other suggestions:

"Providing customer service is the main responsibility for every business in the market [I'd say "marketplace"]. Customer service is not about giving a smile, assistance in finding products or putting some people at a counter with a big customer service board.

Real customer service is far more than that. I believe [take out "is"] businesses should be responsible for a purchased product for at least one year. A store should not be able to refuse to take back a product within the first year unless it has been used roughly."

I don't think many retailers would agree with your "one year rule." A lot of people might be tempted to take back everything they bought after 11 months and 29 days to trade it for a new one! Just a thought.

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Sarah, EssayForum.com