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The Rise of the Indus River Valley Civilizations essay



sheddy 1 / -  
Oct 13, 2013   #1
The Rise of the Indus River Valley Civilizations essay.

The stage of human social development and organization that is considered most advanced is called Civilization. When people are called civilized they have organized such as town, not in small tribes or family groups.

The Egyptians were the first ancient people in the world according to research. Egyptian pyramids were built around 2500bc. Indus River valley (this was a third civilization that) focused on soil and agriculture that helped civilization settle down instead of being normative. The size of the Indus River valley location was almost the size of the United State putting it into perspective. It's boarder by big places like hinduism Kush mountains, home layer, india peninsula which was also called Deccan dyer and also the Ganges River. These are two cities which are Harappa and Mohenjo -Daro. Mohenjo Daro was primarily located at the seaport and it was busy with trade while the other two cities were the ones that were most preserved.

The Egyptians could not plant crops in the desert but rather planted where there was water. During this region they had reliable flooding called Monsoon season. This was a season that runs from about June to September and during that period the Egyptians experience heavy rain fall and this is a lot advantage compared to the rest of the year and turns the Lands Green. Between October to May there is hardly a drop of rain so a lot of people settle in the Monsoon area.

Egypt and Mesopotamia had a lot written by and about them, but in the Indus River valley there was not a lot writing. The longest piece of writing from the Indus River Valley was twenty five words long. There was not a lot of writing and all was just reconstruction. The Indus River Valley was also called the Harappa civilization. This civilization had their rules they set a standard for people to follow and also set a standard for bricks to be made. They made a uniform system for civil administration and established a bureaucracy. Their bureaucracy had governors underneath of them. They had public sewer system for waste to flow into one set location. They also had a public pit well for those who couldn't afford to have their own. Their greatest accomplishment was the standardization of what they implemented. They were a very caring and a peaceful society.

They also had a religion which was referred to as polytheistic. Their priest lived in the Citadel. They had cities that were their main avenue and all the buildings went from north to south and east to west and all of their homes were in the middle.

At the end of civilization there was know one set cause that leads to the end of civilization, they assume that it all started in 1750 but cannot exactly figure it out.

leoking 7 / 24  
Oct 14, 2013   #2
i think you have done a good job in the beginning
dumi 1 / 6793  
Oct 22, 2013   #3
The stage of human social development and organization that is considered most advanced is called Civilization. When people are called civilized they have organized such as town, not in small tribes or family groups.

You need to improve clarity in this introductory paragraph. Improve the presentation of these ideas.

The Egyptians were the first ancient people in the world according to research.

.... they are the first civilization as per the research. Not the first people... there is a big difference in these two interpretations.

The Egyptians were the first ancient people in the world according to research. Egyptian pyramids were built around 2500bc. Indus River valley (this was a third civilization that) focused on soil and agriculture that helped civilization settle down instead of being normative.

What is the link between Egyptian civilization and Indus? You need to establish the link and let your ideas flow in a more logical sequence.
Pahan 1 / 1824  
Oct 22, 2013   #4
The Egyptians could not plant crops in the desert but rather planted where there was water.

.... well, ancient Egyptians are credited as being one of the first groups of people to practice agriculture on a large scale. So, I feel you need to re-phrase this sentence to give that effect;

Egyptians had been one of the first civilizations that practiced agriculture on a large scale. The Nile river provided them with water and fertile soil for their farming activities and their particular farming practices helped them grow staple food crops, especially grains such as wheat and barley. Not only that they grew industrial crops like flax and papyrus too.
dumi 1 / 6793  
Oct 24, 2013   #5
Egypt and Mesopotamia had a lot written by and about them, but in the Indus River valley there was not a lot writing.

Egypt and Mesopotamian civilizations possess lots of written evidence. However, in case of the Indus River valley not much written evidence can be found.

The longest piece of writing from the Indus River Valley was twenty five words long.

The longest piece of writing that is found by the archaeologists has got only twenty five words.
I think you better re-do this essay.... you need to pay lots of attention to its flow... re-arrange your ideas and then start writing.


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