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IELTS Task 1: School Spending_Pie Charts



April April 13 / 147  
Jul 21, 2012   #1
The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991, and 2001.
The three pie charts provide information about how money was spent in a UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.

First of all, the amount of money spent on insurance increased throughout the three years, from 2% in 1981 to 8% in 2001. In contrast, spending on workers' salaries excluding teachers fell by 13% after a 20-year period.

However, there was a different in the category of resources and teachers' salaries. Annual spending on the former accounted for 15% in 198, rose by 5% ten years later, followed by a drop of 11% in 2001. Similarly, with respect to the latter, 40% of the total school spending went to teachers' salaries in the first recorded year; then in 1991, the percentage reached 50% before decreasing slightly by 5% in 2001. Meanwhile, an opposite trend was witnessed regarding furniture and equipment. The proportion of money spent on this category constituted 15% in 1981 and soared by 18% in 2001 after falling dramatically ten years before.

Overall, it is clear from the charts that most of the total annual school spending was for the staff salaries.

Current word count: 184.
Please give me some feedback. Any comments are appreciated!


ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 661  
Jul 21, 2012   #2
The three pie charts provide information about how money was spent in a UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001.

The same comment: "Write a general trend at the end of introduction"

the three studied years

before a slight reduction ofdecreasing slightly by 5% in 2001

Meanwhile, an opposite trend was witnessed(I prefer the word "observed") regarding furniture and equipment. The proportion of money(u can use the word "budget" instead of "money") spent on this category constituted 15% in 1981 and soared by 18% in 2001 after falling dramatically ten years before.

Write this part as a new paragraph.
OP April April 13 / 147  
Jul 21, 2012   #3
Thank you for the corrections, Ahmad!
Will more people take a look at my essay, please?
Benedict01 1 / 5  
Jul 21, 2012   #4
Hi!

Please correct: However, there was a different in the category of resources and teachers' salaries.

Should be DIFFERENCE

thanks!
OP April April 13 / 147  
Jul 22, 2012   #5
Should be DIFFERENCE

=> Oh that was just a typo, I checked the paper that I wrote this essay on, and I got it correct. But thanks for the comment! Won't make such mistakes again :D


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