Science and my previous teachers

- Which of your current or previous teachers do you admire most, and why?
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There was a person who saw my talent the first, encouraged and helped me to pursue the way. Mr. Kim, who was my high school science teacher, is the person that I admire most. He explained science as easy methods while he was teaching in the class. He encouraged students to solve problems even though they couldn't solve it at once. For instance, there was a student who was afraid of solving problems and gives it up easily. However, he tried to explain repeatedly and made her to solve problems. It didn't matter the problem was hard or easy because he did his best while he was teaching students. Moreover, science is hard subject; so many students might not be interested in. I and my classmate who were in his class enjoyed science. He had strong power to attract to teach students so that students rarely were bored and could make class fun. After class, when I came to him for helping and advising about science, he was willing to help me friendly and mentioned that I was good at science. As he always helped me, I was more excited about science, and I wanted to learn about science deeply. I am impressed by him so that I am not giving anything up easily. Also, he found my interest which I wanted to learn and study more about science. He is the great teacher, and I still can't forget and am grateful to him.

I just re-did the whole thing. I hope you don't mind. You had some fantastic ideas! I wish I had Mr. Kim as a teacher, he sounds awesome.

Mr. Kim is the teacher that I admire the most. He saw and put my talent first. While continuing to tell me never to give up. He put something as difficult as science into easy methods for the class to understand. Mr. Kim treated everyone as equals and made sure everyone was able to preform at the best of their abilities. He understood that not everyone understands science and helped until students became more familiar with it. He really put all he had into teaching out class and making it as easy and enjoyable for us. He was even willing to spend his own time after class to help me. Not only did he help me but complemented me on my strengths! He didn't only did he help me and everyone pass the class but he made me enjoy science. He helped be discover the passion for science that I had. He's not only the greatest teacher to me, but he's the best teacher in the world! I'm so grateful and honored to have met him and learned from him.