Several changes of silkworm in its life cycle and method to produce silk cloth

The diagrams elow show the life cycle of silworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevants.

the diagram of silkworm

Given are the diagrams explaining several changes of silkworm in its life cycle and how to produce silk cloth. Generally, there are four main stages of silkworm life cycle and five steps to create cloth made from silk.

In the term of silkworm life cycle, firstly, egg is hatched by moth. After 10 days, it develops to be larva form, consuming mulberry leaf as its daily food. Having silk thread, larva requires 4-6 weeks to approach this stage. In the last step, at 3-6 days later, larva transform to be cocoon then 16 days later it grows as a moth.

On the other hand, the initial step to produce silk cloth is by selecting and sorting the best quality of cocoons. Next, to make cocoons softy, these is boiled in the pan full of water. Thirdly, these cocoons are unwinded to collect 300-900 m thread, twisting it later. Finally, that product weave in flat wood. However, dying process is required in either twisting or weaving, aims to make silk cloth more attractive.

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@ayuriska
The explanation is good, but there is repeating of words of life cycle instead you can use life process or biological clock
Also the 2nd paragraph Having silk thread, larva requires 4-6 weeks to approach this stage. this does not sound correct instead produce or create will go with it.

Hi Ayu, listen, I feel like this summary report is not one of your best work. There is a sense of uneasiness in your writing. Almost as if you do not clearly understand what the process diagram is explaining to the reader? Was that the case for you? The reason that I said this is because there are inconsistencies in the way that you wrote the essay. For example, what did you mean by "4-6 weeks to approach this stage" ? What stage is that? A more fluid method of writing the first development process would have been to simply use the day stage cycles in the presentation instead of breaking it down into steps. that would have created a more relaxed sense in your writing because that is how the cycle was originally presented.

In the second stage, you should have chosen a consistent method by which you could have presented the information. If I were to have advised you about how to write this portion before you worked on it. I would have told you to use the "first, second, third, etc." process of depicting the steps. That would have created a more consistent presentation and also clearly depicted the importance of each step.