Society's appreciation and attention to teachers

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they were nowadays. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In contemporary society, we can find a teacher to teach us about everything. The definition of a teacher is no longer just the profession of teaching students in schools as it was in the old society. In the context of the more meticulous division of labour and the higher the degree of specialization in society, novices always require teachers to impart the knowledge and experience. Therefore, from my perspective, I perceive teachers are more appreciated and valued than ever.

There is no doubt about the influence of education on the future development of individuals. With the development of technology, every country in the world has seen the power of education as technology cannot be established without a strong backup of education, and the most crucial link between the textbook concept and the students is teachers. Students can obtain direct feedback from teachers, which can help them better understand knowledge. Therefore, if a country wants to gain a foothold in the world, it must increase its expenditure on education, especially in training teachers. In addition, compared with the past, as the government lays more emphasis on education, the social status of teachers has been greatly improved. In view of the fact that artificial intelligence is still considered to be unable to replace the function of teachers, teachers are still an irreplaceable role, and they undertake basic construction work in the social structure.

Furthermore, as we focus more on the physical and mental health of individuals, people pay more attention to developing and cultivating their own interests and hobbies. Meanwhile, the division of labour in society is becoming more and more specific. Whether one wants to become a professional in a specific field and improve their employability or just learn out of interest, he or she must accomplish their goals with the assistance of teachers. Even if people start to learn on video sites such as youtube, the video publisher is also taking the role of teacher.

All in all, if we rethink this issue, we will find that society's appreciation and attention to teachers are much higher than before.

'In contemporary society, we can find a teacher to teach us about everything': The meaning of this sentence is not clear. I know that you explained more in the next sentence, but I think it would be better if you can combine ones in just one sentence.

For example, The teachers these days could convey not only academic knowledge but invaluable life lessons.

You seem to explain your opinion immediately in the introduction --> should only use 2 sentences for the intro-one for general statement, and one for your opinion without any explanation.

Besides, your conclusion section should be balanced with the intro!

The essay is too long for a 40 minute task. You should only aim to write between 275-290 words to allow you enough time to double check your presentation for errors, and have enough time to correct these. Yes, there are errors in your essay if you bother to review it. Your aim, as an exam taker, is to make as little to no mistakes as possible so that you can get the best possible writing score. The rule of thumb is, write no more than 3-5 sentences per paragraph for maximum scoring efficiency.

You have not used the original information in your presentation. You have not properly rephrased the original statement nor properly outlined your reasons for the opinion you should have presented. These are required information based on the TA rule regarding the clarity of your opinion. The addition of the reasoning topics would help the examiner get a better overview / quick understanding of your opinion that should be in the succeeding presentation paragraphs.

You should have simply indicated the paraphrase as:

The teachers of today are better appreciated than their predecessors were. This is the opinion that most people have, which I also support. My agreement with this statement comes from the way that teachers are now seen as influencers and how teachers are able to shape the future of their students based on their ability to influence young minds.

Now, while the example I gave above is still not in accordance with the presentation, as I tried to base it mostly on what you wrote, which is severely lacking in appropriate discussion topics, it is a close enough version of how the paraphrase section should have been presented. Your essay does not really discuss the appreciation aspect as required by the essay. You are more of describing the modern job of a teacher and how it is done. Which is not the point of the essay. Your concluding paraphrase is also inaccurate and useless. It should be written with at least 40 words and 2-3 sentences that properly restate the topic and your discussion points.

Again, the length of the essay is useless when the content and presentation shows all you can do is type in English. You have to be able to show that you understood the topic being presented through a proper discussion of your supporting reasons within 2 paragraphs.

you can add in the conclusion by paraphrase the introduction

e.g teacher as professional is able to guide student as well as role in the society based on their degree