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SAT essay: Can success be disastrous?



MLE27 2 / 2  
Nov 4, 2010   #1
Prompt for essay: Can success be disastrous?
I am not good a writing and I would love any help you could give me on this. Thanks :)
SUCCESS
Success can have different outcomes. Success can be a positive thing, where goals are reached. Being successful can be blinding in certain situations. When one becomes successful most people become haughty and arrogant. Goals may come to pass in life, making one successful, but the grass in not always greener on the other side.

Success is getting to a set goal; making life what you want it to be. Reaching your dreams and having everything you want. Everyone views being successful differently, because everyone has different passions and dreams. Having a goal of getting good grades helps for applying to colleges and helps you be successful later in life. Fervently working to earn more money in life satisfies the people who enjoy having a plethora of material things in life. Both of these goals have successful and happy outcomes.

When climbing in life to a certain goal, a person can be blind to certain situations. Sometimes
becoming successful you have to make hard choices before you get there. Being set on what is wanted sometimes means other people could be hurt. Some things in life may have to be given up, in order to receive certain rewards of success. Just like when a celebrity has to give up ever having a personal life in order to get money and fame. A kid in middle school having the choice of being in the in crowd and the outcome is losing true friends. These choices have to be made on what you want more, but can have the consequences of being too ambitious.

Pride can get in the way of being successful and happy. Winning an award for something is a great moment of success, but after winning a dozen of them it is hard not to become a braggart. When success builds an ego, it can make a person arrogant and can create a downfall. Being overly haughty can cause you to lose sight of what is actually wanted to be happy. It can even cause a person to lose themselves and create a whole new person.

Gaining success can have many outcomes. Having a successful life is a good thing to strive for, and can have many great rewards in life. If a person is not careful, there could be some adversity that comes along the road to success. Keeping a thankful view on life will make your path clear, but becoming arrogant causes problems in having success. So, there for success can be disastrous and cause turmoil if you are not chary and wise.

Kimayu 5 / 25  
Nov 7, 2010   #2
1)When one becomes successful,he or she becomes haughty and arrogant
2)Success is about setting your goals,making life what you want it to be and reaching for your dreams to get everything you want
3)Sometimes to become successful you have to make hard choices before you get there.

Being set on what is wanted sometimes means other people could be hurt

I don't understand what this sentence means
4)You have to give up some things in life , in order to receive certain rewards of success.
5)Being grateful for your successes, will make your path clear


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