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Summary _ Anniesa Hasibuan Becomes First Designer to Present NYFW Collection with Hijabs



Hujjatul19 45 / 64  
Sep 19, 2016   #1
This summary is extracted from an article published on cosmopolitan.com/style-beauty/a3381189/anniesa-hasibuan-first-nyfw-runway-collection-with-hijabs/ on 15 September 2016. Its origina title is Anniesa Hasibuan Becomes First Designer to Present NYFW Collection with Hijabs

Fashion designers are getting more competitive. In the lastest New York Fashion Week,a very prestigious event among fashion designers, presents a very talented designer, Anniesa Hasibuan. An Indonesian fashion designer who focuses on muslim fashion. This very talented designer presents her collections which are inspired by her hometown, Jakarta. By using colorful silks and patterns, she made 48 glamour collections that consist of trousers, suits, kimonos, tunics, and gowns. She said that her aim is to introduce Indonesian name globally especially in fashion world. At the end of her runway, she gets a standing ovation, a high esteem in Fashion Weeks.

fadhilmd25 41 / 71  
Sep 19, 2016   #2
Dear Hujjatul19, here are some advices for your writing, feel free to correct me,

which are inspired by her hometown, --> from her hometown

she made 48 glamour --> she made about

Indonesian name --> Indonesia

in fashion world --> in the fashion world

she gets a standing ovation --> she got a standing ovation

hope it helps to improve your writing skills,

regards


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