Technology has made our lives too complicated, the solution is to live a simple life without it

When we live in the digital era 4.0 like today, technology has been more popular to us including children. Therefore, some individuals think that technology has made our lives more complex and the solution for that is to live a basic life avoiding technology. In my opinion, I agree with this view.

Firstly, with the development of technology, human dependence on it is more and more serious. For example, in the past, students usually asked their teacher, their friends or did hard tests on their own, but now, most of them choose to search in google or on some platforms. Thus, their problem solving skills decreased dramatically.
Finally, using technology everyday leads our lives to become more complicated than ever. In the present, technology has deeply intervened in our lives. In the past, we just had to go to school then came back home and played with our families. But nowadays, after coming back home, we have several works to do, such as go online and check for homework, online courses or look for documents. These things make our lives more and more complex compared to the past.

In conclusion, with the modern of technology, we need to raise awareness about its drawbacks and have sustainable solutions for this.

Uh, the essay is lacking 40 words to meet the minimum TOEFL word count. There is a writing minimum of 250 words, maximum of 300 word for any given English language test. Failure to meet that requirement always ends up as a negative factor in your final score. You are given enough time and word allowance to fully explain your opinion, take full advantage of it to show that you are capable of thinking and writing logically, and within reason, in English.

The writing in this essay is meant for the IELTS test, not TOEFL. there is no need for a writer's opinion in the TOEFL test because you are to start discussing your reasons from the very first paragraph. There is no reason to recap the prompt and pov in this test. So giving an opinion like you did will be taken into consideration, but will not be a major scoring factor.

You have problems with sentence structuring throughout the essay. You tend to rely on run on sentences and commas instead of varying your punctuation marks and using clear thoughts to present your ideas. Work more on familiarizing yourself with the types of English sentences and how to write them. The same goes for punctuation marks and how to use these in the sentence presentations.