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Young people today are more likely to invest their time and effort on improving the world than young people in the past.
There exists a range of myths toward youth's voluntary. One of such myths is that young people today put more their efforts to make the place we live better than the youngsters in the past. The reasons are obvious and strong.
It is said that since the students have more opportunities to arrange their schedule nowadays, and thus they have time to participate in community services. This, however, is not necessarily true. Indeed, the students have more time after classes, but they will invest in themselves instead of society. They join the clubs to make more new friends and learn social skills or have a part-time job to earn money. It seems that they are able to take more advantages from other works immediately than helping the people.
It is also feared, on the other hand, youngsters have lots of freedom to get touch with the charities or social activities, while there were many laws confined people's actions from the former government. The fact, nonetheless, may be otherwise. The frauds from donating money or crimes about the legality of the groups are increasing that usually launch on the news. Sometimes, it is difficult for teenagers to tell the illegal situations without much experience. It will pose them into danger and decrease the ideas to volunteer to help others.
Some people still argue, lastly, that young people easily conduct what they desire to do, while people did not have a range of sources in the past. But this argument still appears arbitrary. Although the children receive the information about being kind to the environment on the internet or in the school, the parents overly protect their children. The parents afraid their only child will get hurt or ask the child to focus on his homework. Sending their children to the cram school or staying at home safely is more crucial than help others.
Given the reasons that investing in themselves, keeping the danger at bay, and overly be protected by parents, it is not logical to say the young people are willing to contribute to improving the society.
Young people today are more likely to invest their time and effort on improving the world than young people in the past.
young people contribution to the society
There exists a range of myths toward youth's voluntary. One of such myths is that young people today put more their efforts to make the place we live better than the youngsters in the past. The reasons are obvious and strong.
It is said that since the students have more opportunities to arrange their schedule nowadays, and thus they have time to participate in community services. This, however, is not necessarily true. Indeed, the students have more time after classes, but they will invest in themselves instead of society. They join the clubs to make more new friends and learn social skills or have a part-time job to earn money. It seems that they are able to take more advantages from other works immediately than helping the people.
It is also feared, on the other hand, youngsters have lots of freedom to get touch with the charities or social activities, while there were many laws confined people's actions from the former government. The fact, nonetheless, may be otherwise. The frauds from donating money or crimes about the legality of the groups are increasing that usually launch on the news. Sometimes, it is difficult for teenagers to tell the illegal situations without much experience. It will pose them into danger and decrease the ideas to volunteer to help others.
Some people still argue, lastly, that young people easily conduct what they desire to do, while people did not have a range of sources in the past. But this argument still appears arbitrary. Although the children receive the information about being kind to the environment on the internet or in the school, the parents overly protect their children. The parents afraid their only child will get hurt or ask the child to focus on his homework. Sending their children to the cram school or staying at home safely is more crucial than help others.
Given the reasons that investing in themselves, keeping the danger at bay, and overly be protected by parents, it is not logical to say the young people are willing to contribute to improving the society.