My father is who I admired most and also my role model.He is a no-nonsense man.He rarely talks with others jokingly,even who is his daughter.He is an excellent leader in his company and a strict father for me. He always requires me to do every thing wholeheartedly and never allows me giving up until to the last.Stern as he is,father is full of affection to me.Not only does he encourage me to insist my dream but also let me learn to enjoy the process of striving for it.I benefit from the communication with my father very much.With his worthy advices I could increase myself gradually.
Topic:My father.It's a preparation of speaking section for toefl.
This is a good idea for an essay. However there are a few glitches - i will rearrange it
I think the first sentence would be nicer if you say "The individual I admire most is my father - my role model"
He rarely talks with others jokingly,even who is his daughter not even me - his own daughter, (join this sentence with the other) but he is an excellent leader in the community.
He is very strict, always encouraging me to do everything wholeheartedly and to never give up
Not only does he encourage me toinsist pursue my dream but also let me learn he teaches me to enjoy the process of striving for towards it.
Stern as he is,father is full of affection to me my father is very affectionate towards me [here i would add another sentence which shows how he is affectionate]
I benefit from the communication with my father very much.With his worthy advices I could increase myself gradually. I benefit greatly from my father's advice and examples. They serve as great motivation for me to build strong character.
Remember to put a space after each period !
Hope this helps
I think the first sentence would be nicer if you say "The individual I admire most is my father - my role model"
He rarely talks with others jokingly,
He is very strict, always encouraging me to do everything wholeheartedly and to never give up
Not only does he encourage me to
Stern as he is,
Remember to put a space after each period !
Hope this helps
The individual I admire most is my father - my role model.He is an excellent leader of his company. Facing with a serious of complicated problems, he tries his best to solve them with a positive attitude.He treat his employees fair and keep a common touch.For instant,he always has his lunch with employees and continues communication with them everyday however is he busy.Thus,he is one of the most popular boss in his company.
As to me,he is a strict father.He always requires me to do everything wholeheartedly and never allows me to give up until to the last.Not only does he encourage me to pursue my dream but also he teaches me to enjoy the process of striving toward it.I benefit greatly from my father's advice and examples. They serve as great motivation for me to build strong character.
As to me,he is a strict father.He always requires me to do everything wholeheartedly and never allows me to give up until to the last.Not only does he encourage me to pursue my dream but also he teaches me to enjoy the process of striving toward it.I benefit greatly from my father's advice and examples. They serve as great motivation for me to build strong character.
Okay, you got some very good corrections here. You can look at them all and practice typing the essay correctly. Do you have questions about the corrections? It will be great if you try to use these ideas and type the essay again so that you get practice doing it the right way.
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