Topic: In your opinion what factors contribute a good employee.

This is my topic in english test to apply to an company. Please help me correct it.
Topic: In your opinion what factors contribute a good employee.
My writting:

Nowadays, most of people are working for a company. And every employer agree that Having a good employee are important thing in development process of company. So, what is a good employee? I think a good employee is a man of work, communication, and he also has a good attitude in working.

First, "A man of work", it means that the staff works hard, and he finishes all work in time. In the economy with low growth as today, working hard has an important mean for all businesses. The employees who work hard will contribute more value for company. So, in the view of employer, they will have a more important position.

Working environment is environment of communication between people and people. So a man who has good communication skill will work more effectively. In additional, today a lot of business staff has to contact with a lot of customer, provider, investors... So good communication skill with helps employee gains more customer for company.

Finally, a good attitude in working. A staff who see opportunity where most only see "difficulty" is a good attitude employee. He always has a nice view about everything around him. He willingness to learn to solve with difficult problem. This is very important with an employee. Therefore, he can do what other can't do. And the company also has more assets.

first of all, i don't like the introduction "nowadays, most of people are working for a company" i think it's weak.

i think maybe you should start like this : Having a good employee is a very important factor for the development process of a company. however, There are many characteristics that an employee should have. First of all, ( i don't know i cant understand 'A man of work' ) maybe you should say for example, A good employee should be dependable (A great employee can be counted to always have their work done right, when it is supposed to be done) or a good employee should be a hard worker.

secondly, ( i think you shouldn't use communication), you can say, a good employee should has good working skills in constantly seeking ways to improve work. or good communication skills that helps in attracting costumers.

thirdly, a great employee has a great attitude that makes work great for everyone else by having a good spirit about their job. or a good employee is who has a good attitude in solving problems

i think you should bring more important factors that an employee should have like he could be trusted or he should has good english so that he can communicate with foreign people.

you can google " characteristics of a good employee" it might help you.

hope i helped :^)