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"Trauma Still Fresh for Rwandan Genocide Survivors" Summary


Gian16 2 / 6  
Sep 13, 2016   #1
The unforgettable memory, raised in Kinyanya 20 years ago, still give the serious wound to the victims. Every April be the dumps moment, because it reminds the genocide, where people are haunting to kill.

The Interahamwe ( murderers) forced mothers and children to be viewers while to shoot the people. Almost people lose their families, and hope. They prefer to die, rather than still alive without their treasure.

Above 40 thousand were killed every 3 days at the Murambi. The killers said " those we have killed, will serve as a mattress for our dead president, you will be the blanket".

Cecile and her younger sister survived from those dangerous situation, even though she ever give up and prefer killed by murderers, she has no choice to live.

On this present time, she and her sister take care of five children victim's of genocide in her own house

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rian31 14 / 22  
Sep 14, 2016   #2
HAI gian
here is my suggestion for you

The Interahamwe ( murderers) forced mothers and children to ...

Abovemore 40 thousands were killed every ...

Cecile and her younger sister survived from those dangerous ...

thanks
keep writing classmate
FirmanRomadhon20 9 / 15  
Sep 15, 2016   #3
Hi Gian16,
This is little suggestion for you :
1. "... raised in Kinyanya 20 years ago, still give the serious wound ..."
... so it should be still GAVE the serious ....................
2. " those we have killed, will serve as a mattress for ...".
It may be your means : Those are who we have killed, They will be a mattress for death our president.


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