IELTS Task 1: The unemployment rates: US and Japan - 5% in March 99

The graph shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan among March 1993 and March 1999.

Generally, percentage of work force increase sharply from March 1993 to March 1999 in Japan. Even though in US, percentage of work force decreased sharply every year.

The unemployment rates of Japan has 2.5 % in March1993, then increased sharply until March 1996. In March 1997, it decreased slightly about just fewer than 4 % then increased sharply until March 1999 namely 5 %.

By contrast, during the same period of time, the percentage of unemployed in US fluctuated slightly in every year, started from March 1993 until March 1999. There were changes in the unemployment rate in the USA, as the figure about 5% until about March 1997. Despite some minor fluctuation, the figure remained relatively stable for the next few years, ending the final period at about 5%.

To summary, in March 99, unemployment rates of US and Japan have same value which is around 5 % of their work force unemployed.

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The graph shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan amongfrom March 1993 andto March 1999.


... this is your overview and try to present it as a very generalized observation that covers the main picture of this image based presentation;
Overall, the two countries have experienced opposite trends with regard to unemployment rates, Japan having an upward trend while the US has experienced a downward trend during this six year period.

paraphrase ????

try to correct the first sentence, and compare it with the second sentence, what you have found there?
this is a small mistake or we call common mistake that is often made by ilets takers, but you should pay more attention to them

For this task, you don't have to have a conclusion in which you summarize facts.