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Unemployment rates in US and Japan from March 1993 to March 1999


upinipin 32 / 49 1  
Apr 22, 2014   #1
The graph shows unemployment rates in US and Japan from March 1993 to March 1999. The data used percentage of work. Standard value from 2.5 to 7.0.
The graph shows two different lines. First line illustrates unemployment rates in US and second line shows unemployment rates in Japan.

Unemployment in both of these countries in along six years are contrast. In along six years unemployment rate in US decrease sharply from 7% work force to 5% work force. Although, unemployment rate in Japan from March 1993 to march 1999 increase sharply at 2.5% work force.

Employment rates in US from march 1993 to march 1996 shows fluctuated decrease step by step at 5.5% work force. From March 1996 to March 1999 fluctuated step by step at 5%. Unemployment rates in Japan from march 1993 to march 1995 increase about 1 %. From March 1995 to March 1997 increase just under 1%. From March 1997 to March 1999 rose about 0.5%.

To sum up, unemployment rates in US in six years decline sharply at 2%. Although, unemployment rates in Japan in each three years latest rose step by step just under 1%.




fikri 5 / 317 71  
Apr 23, 2014   #2
Standard value from 2.5 to 7.0.

where is the verb?

be careful when you compose a sentence,,it looks a small problem for you, but it may be your big trouble in the future
so, you should pay more attention to your structure
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Apr 23, 2014   #3
You need to improve your approach a lot.
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Apr 24, 2014   #4
You need to pay attention to the approach suggested by Pahan above. This task is about report writing and the above approach (Pahan's suggestion) is the best for reporting your observations. So, what you have written above lacks a clear introduction and an overview. They are must features for this task. However, you don't need to have a conclusion for this task and there avoid a conclusion.
Eva Novita Sari 47 / 71 2  
Apr 24, 2014   #5
Employment rates in US from march 1993 to march 1996 shows fluctuated decrease step by step at 5.5% work force

Hi upinipin...
This is word double verb, you should put conjunction because 2 verb 1 conjunction
:)
tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Apr 29, 2014   #6
The graph shows unemployment rates in US and Japan from March 1993 to March 1999. The data used percentage of work. Standard value from 2.5 to 7.0.
The graph shows two different lines. First line illustrates unemployment rates in US and second line shows unemployment rates in Japan.

is that your introduction? if it is your introduction i think too long and quite confusing.

Introduction
The graph illustrates idleness rates in US and Japan during a particular period of time over ranging March 1993 to March 1999.


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