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Universities bear the responsibility of cultivating and developing interests of students.



aosi111 1 / 3  
Apr 20, 2011   #1
Issue^13="13) Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the students' field of study"

I strongly agree with the contention that universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study primarily because one of the most important aim of universities is to help students find their true interest and help them broden the scope of knowledge. However, at the same time we should not ignore the fact that overstating the importance of the subjects outside student's field will lead to a dangerous situation as for one's occupation career.

First of all, universities bear the responsibility of cultivating and developing interests of students. High school graduates generally don't truely know what is their interests on certain subjects before they have access to various of displines. There is a great need for them to get a, more or less, deeper understanding of each kind of displines in order to finally determine the final research oritation.

In addation, since a variety of disciplines are logically associated, the study of an irrelated course, as it seems to be, will benefit one own major. The knowledge of mathmatics will contribute to either the research of economy and architecture. For example, Da Vinci is a great scientist and aritist which may seem to be impossibe for him to bear such two distinct talents. As we know, his study of anatomy played an virtal role in his successful and precise depiction of human body. In this sense, the provision of a variety of displines will enhence the scope of students' knowledge and offer a more comprehensive angle concerning any problems.

However, over emphasize the importance of studying the course outside may lead the students neglecting the knowledge of certain fields of study, and thereby have no capability and energy to engage any realm of employment or research work. Knowledge outside one's own majoy just exerts a contributive function, like providing background information and striking inspiration. So after the general training of various of courses we need to get back to focus on certain subjects.

From all the analysis above, we can safely draw the conclusion that it's rational for university to offer students a variety of courses no matter they have a direct relationship or not with students' field of study and it's also essential to keep a good banance.

bahareh 18 / 48  
Apr 21, 2011   #2
I read your essay, and it seems very comprehensible with variety of vacabulary. The only matter that I found through your essay is related to some of the complex sentences which may make your reader get confused ; like the sixth sentence.

good try
bahareh
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Apr 21, 2011   #3
Wow, great intro paragraph. How about adding one more shore sentence to the end of it. Make it a small sentence that gets right to the point and clarifies your message. Make is a sentence of maybe 12 words. It will be nice to have a short sentence to follow those long ones and complete the intro.

As we know, his study of anatomy played an virtal vital role in his...

However, overemphasizing the importance of studying the courses outside one's interests may lead the students to neglect the knowledge in certain fields of study, and thereby cause them to have no capability and energy to engage any realm of employment or research work. ---I made some changes here...

Nice job!!

:-)
OP aosi111 1 / 3  
Apr 24, 2011   #4
Bahareh
Thank you for your remarks, bahareh! This essay is my first Issue, and I quote many old ideas and complates from others' essays. I will try to correct those fallacies.

Kevin
Your advises are really helpful and useful for me, Kevin! I will try to write some brilliant short sentences next time.


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