One of the main problems that contributes to the severe troubles is that
violent movies make people neglected .
people suppose that the high rates of violent scenes are leading to detrimental community issues .
This problem , among others , will be discussed hereafter, and methods which can reduce them will be given .Delete this. Instead of writing this way, express your opinion. It is not presented in your introduction.
To begin with , there are three factors that bring
bringing about the
consequence of violent films .[/quote]
First of all , v iolent films made people
Moreover , Violent moviesv
Due to the fact that , Youngsters are not mature enoughy
For example , If the governmenti
If the government removes
violent scenes in movies
Beside , Parents should have a disciplinep
arentsBeside, parents shouldimpose discipline in their home
In conclusion , while there are many issues aringing as a consequence of the increasing amounts of violence in movies,(use comma instead of period)The italic part should be combined as one. They are not separate sentences.Good luck:)
. I believe that the best way to solve that problems is education . Hence , People will understand that violence is unacceptable and they will not mimic it .